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bfjrbfjr Registered Users Posts: 10,980 Major grins
edited May 28, 2010 in Street and Documentary
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  • Wil DavisWil Davis Registered Users Posts: 1,692 Major grins
    edited May 22, 2010
    Like the composition …esp in #2…

    (in #1 the face is too near the edge of the frame, and my attention keeps falling out of the picture… eek7.gif )

    I might bring the shadows up v. slightly in #2…

    (even at the expense of the highlights… …although if this was a print, then I'd use a slightly softer paper!)

    Thanks for sharing…

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  • lizzard_nyclizzard_nyc Registered Users Posts: 4,056 Major grins
    edited May 22, 2010
    Benjamin,
    I like #2--it's so stark and dreary and everyday.
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  • sabeshsabesh Registered Users Posts: 194 Major grins
    edited May 22, 2010
    I agree with Wil's critique. I enjoyd both shots. It's good to see everyday realism in these shots. Cheers.
  • michswissmichswiss Registered Users, Retired Mod Posts: 2,235 Major grins
    edited May 23, 2010
    I think #2 has a ton of potential. Not sure what the original shot looked like, but I'd revisit the conversion as well as the framing in the square crop. Nice.
  • bfjrbfjr Registered Users Posts: 10,980 Major grins
    edited May 24, 2010
    Thanks Folks
    will take a look at your suggestions.

    Will can't crop less, she was carrying a big white plastic bag !!
    Besides it was an image of light and pots and she's a walk on :D

    the second shot to me is all about the varied contrasts in the image.
    So bringing up shadows might change that ne_nau.gif
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  • RichardRichard Administrators, Vanilla Admin Posts: 19,908 moderator
    edited May 24, 2010
    bfjr wrote: »
    the second shot to me is all about the varied contrasts in the image.
    So bringing up shadows might change that ne_nau.gif
    I really like #2 but I want to see a little more detail in the face on the right--maybe just dodge the eyes a bit ne_nau.gif.
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  • bfjrbfjr Registered Users Posts: 10,980 Major grins
    edited May 24, 2010
    Richard wrote: »
    I really like #2 but I want to see a little more detail in the face on the right--maybe just dodge the eyes a bit ne_nau.gif.

    OK you twisted my arm
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  • Wil DavisWil Davis Registered Users Posts: 1,692 Major grins
    edited May 24, 2010
    Ah!!!!!!

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  • RichardRichard Administrators, Vanilla Admin Posts: 19,908 moderator
    edited May 25, 2010
    bfjr wrote: »
    OK you twisted my arm
    Much better. clap.gif
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  • bfjrbfjr Registered Users Posts: 10,980 Major grins
    edited May 27, 2010
    Wil Davis wrote: »
    Ah!!!!!!

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    Richard wrote: »
    Much better. clap.gif

    Alllrighttyy Then :D
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  • Jack'll doJack'll do Registered Users Posts: 2,977 Major grins
    edited May 27, 2010
    I agree with with Will and Richard. Much better. thumb.gif
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  • bdcolenbdcolen Registered Users Posts: 3,804 Major grins
    edited May 28, 2010
    bfjr wrote: »

    Definitely better.thumb.gif
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  • bendruckerphotobendruckerphoto Registered Users Posts: 579 Major grins
    edited May 28, 2010
    You definitely don't want to cut someone's face off as you did in #1. But #2, especially with edits, is excellent. It really tells a story, whereas the first shot doesn't say anything to me.
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