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#41 First try

MarkRMarkR Registered Users Posts: 2,099 Major grins
edited January 3, 2010 in The Dgrin Challenges
And, I'm back! Anybody miss me? :wink

Here's my first shot at #41 (and my wife informs me she has much classier shoes she'll let me use for the final!) C&C Always welcome.

"The first date."
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    Aspecto5Aspecto5 Registered Users Posts: 311 Major grins
    edited December 28, 2009
    I think this is an excellent concept. So many directions you could go to add more color and even some kind of background for those first date experiences. I think you'll do quite well with this idea. :D
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    WhatSheSawWhatSheSaw Registered Users Posts: 2,221 Major grins
    edited December 28, 2009
    Very expressive! I like it. clap.gif

    And, yes, I did miss you. :D
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    HaliteHalite Registered Users Posts: 467 Major grins
    edited December 29, 2009
    Great concept! Nice story told with simple objects. clap.gif I think you could punch up the execution. Glad to see you back.
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    tinamarie52tinamarie52 Registered Users Posts: 954 Major grins
    edited December 29, 2009
    Welcome back. Great concept! Can' t wait to see the next pair of shoes in the final version.

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    GreensquaredGreensquared Registered Users Posts: 2,115 Major grins
    edited December 29, 2009
    Awesome concept! I wonder if you can push it further with a contextual setting. ne_nau.gif
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    MarkRMarkR Registered Users Posts: 2,099 Major grins
    edited December 29, 2009
    Thanks for the encouragement!thumb.gif I'm working on round two.

    I decided I wanted to avoid putting any context around the shoes -- I want them to tell their story simply and without distraction, almost as if they're puppets on a stage. Dunno if that makes sense or not.
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    divamumdivamum Registered Users Posts: 9,021 Major grins
    edited December 29, 2009
    You bet we missed you - it's not the same without the Artistador!! thumb.gif

    You have set the bar high already on this - talk about jumping into the fray with a great idea! Awesome! clap.gif
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    MarkRMarkR Registered Users Posts: 2,099 Major grins
    edited December 29, 2009
    Here's round two.

    "The First Date"
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    Not sure about black on black background, and I'm really not happy with the "expression" of the female shoes, but I'm not sure how to fix it. ne_nau.gif
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    WhatSheSawWhatSheSaw Registered Users Posts: 2,221 Major grins
    edited December 29, 2009
    I like the black BG.

    Maybe one of the women's shoes up on tiptoe. ne_nau.gif
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    travelwaystravelways Registered Users Posts: 7,854 Major grins
    edited December 29, 2009
    Very nice concept/idea :)

    I also like the black background, but on the second shot, I can see a hallow around the woman's shoes
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    MarkRMarkR Registered Users Posts: 2,099 Major grins
    edited December 29, 2009
    photo-bug wrote:
    Very nice concept/idea :)

    I also like the black background, but on the second shot, I can see a hallow around the woman's shoes

    Good catch! thumb.gif
    The black on black is really hard to do and show good separation without some weird artifacts showing up. It's not working for me. My wife found another pair of shoes that contrast with the sneakers but in a different way -- will try that tomorrow.

    Still need ideas for the girl shoe placement though. ne_nau.gif
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    travelwaystravelways Registered Users Posts: 7,854 Major grins
    edited December 29, 2009
    MarkR wrote:

    Still need ideas for the girl shoe placement though. ne_nau.gif

    Oh, I forgot: I actually like the girl shoes and their "expression" :)
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    MarkRMarkR Registered Users Posts: 2,099 Major grins
    edited December 30, 2009
    Ok, 3rd time's the charm?
    Decided against the fancy black shoes. Found my wife had some shoes that, to me, at least, give off a Molly Ringwold/Pretty-in-Pink vibe.

    Your thoughts?

    "The First Date"
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    HaliteHalite Registered Users Posts: 467 Major grins
    edited December 30, 2009
    I like this last pairing the best. More youthful.
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    WhatSheSawWhatSheSaw Registered Users Posts: 2,221 Major grins
    edited December 30, 2009
    thumb.gif I agree. This pairing really works. Maybe a tad more space on the left side.
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    tinamarie52tinamarie52 Registered Users Posts: 954 Major grins
    edited December 30, 2009
    I like these shoes the best so far. The girl shoes seem to be too far in the background. I 6think a little more light would brighten them....unless you were going for the shy look.

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    MarkRMarkR Registered Users Posts: 2,099 Major grins
    edited December 30, 2009
    Thanks everybody for the feedback.

    I added some negative space to the left and a lot more to the top (not sure about this) and boosted the vibrance/saturation of the girl shoes.

    C&C welcome.

    "First Date"
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    divamumdivamum Registered Users Posts: 9,021 Major grins
    edited December 30, 2009
    The shoes are perfect! Only thing I might do is clone out the mfr/size information - not needed, and they distract from the otherwise delightful story. I'm still blown away that somebody could make unfilled shoes emotional - this is such a winning shot for me!
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    MarkRMarkR Registered Users Posts: 2,099 Major grins
    edited December 31, 2009
    Thank you Aspecto5, WhatSheSaw, Halite, Photo-bug, Greensquared, tinamarie52, for all for your help! iloveyou.gif

    Entry is posted. Happy New Year!
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    Wil DavisWil Davis Registered Users Posts: 1,692 Major grins
    edited December 31, 2009
    Nice idea! Interesting composition…

    …however, I can't help thinking that the women's shoes are the wrong way around, but perhaps it's just the angle, or is that intentional? headscratch.gif

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    MarkRMarkR Registered Users Posts: 2,099 Major grins
    edited December 31, 2009
    Wil Davis wrote:
    Nice idea! Interesting composition…

    …however, I can't help thinking that the women's shoes are the wrong way around, but perhaps it's just the angle, or is that intentional? headscratch.gif

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    - Wil

    They're the right way round. They are a bit "floppy" so it may not be clear which way they go, but they are right way round. ne_nau.gif
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    dlscott56dlscott56 Registered Users Posts: 1,324 Major grins
    edited January 3, 2010
    divamum wrote:
    ... Only thing I might do is clone out the mfr/size information - not needed, and they distract from the otherwise delightful story...

    I agree. Otherwise, PERFECT!
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