DSS 55 - First Try

WhatSheSaw · July 15, 2010

Do any of these work? No titles yet.

#1

#2

#3

lkbart · July 15, 2010

I like #1 - the motorcycles seem to "ground" the photo without being the focus of it - does that make sense? In #2 the motorcyclels seem to be more the focus of the photo, & #3 seems distorted.

BTW - appreciate your comments & help! I'm trying!!

The Curious Camel · July 15, 2010

FWIW, I like the first one best.
You might try doing it in b/w.
My eye keeps going there to see what's in color but that could just be me to.
Nice work.

Peace, gail

pyroPrints.com · July 15, 2010

yeah #1 is the strongest of the bunch

travelways · July 15, 2010

I like the first one best, too.

liflander · July 16, 2010

i like the idea of 3, but i think it was an afterthought cropped from 1. i would love to see 3 shot from different angles so its all about the stripes and nothing else.

kdotaylor · July 16, 2010

lkbart wrote: »

I like #1 - the motorcycles seem to "ground" the photo without being the focus of it - does that make sense? In #2 the motorcyclels seem to be more the focus of the photo, & #3 seems distorted.

BTW - appreciate your comments & help! I'm trying!!

I agree.

dlscott56 · July 17, 2010

The Curious Camel wrote: »

FWIW, I like the first one best.
You might try doing it in b/w.
My eye keeps going there to see what's in color but that could just be me to.
Nice work.

Peace, gail

If you could experiment to make the stripes 'pop' a bit more maybe? Just a thought.

TLVoDra · July 17, 2010

#1 for me too. I actually like having the motorcycles there...and how is that they are color coordinated? They are all red/black/silver. Side note...I do find it interesting that the handicapped parking icon plays a somewhat prominent role in the bottom 3rd of left edge. Maybe this seems ironic to me because I work on a rehab unit and see the aftermath of motorcycle accidents. Anyway, for me, this image has a lot of symbolism in addition to the stripes. Planned or not....I think it's great. Maybe crop to include just a tiny bit more of the cycles and icon in #1 in addition to the stripes?

AndMan · July 18, 2010

#1 +1

WhatSheSaw · July 25, 2010

Thanks for all of the great feedback, everyone! Life caught up with me this week and I got major league distracted. But I did a bit of work on this and some other ideas.

#4

#5

#6

#7

#8 Striated

#9 Spiral

#10 Random

#11 Foggy Morning (I may not use this one)

WhatSheSaw · July 25, 2010

I guess #1 is still the best. Here are 2 different PPs of it. Any preference?

Original #1

#1A

#1B

Side by side smaller versions

karlabbott · July 25, 2010

I do like #11 quite a bit, but feel that #1B is probably the strongest and best suited to this challenge.

WhatSheSaw · July 25, 2010

Thanks, Karl!

I have a couple of other candidates. Are any of these better?

#12

#13

#14

#15

#16

karlabbott · July 25, 2010

Of these, I like #14 the best, but I still think #1B is the best from a stripes standpoint. #15 is cool too -- I had thought of doing something like that last weekend -- it's difficult to find straight stripes on trees!

Overall, I still really like #1B

Would be interesting to see that one as a black and white...

ic4u · July 25, 2010

I'm liking 1B best...you're abstracts are cool, just don't scream stripes (IMO). I do like your foggy field, maybe cropping a little off the left, not all of the trees, just minimize them some, otherwise, I like that one too.

nightpixels · July 25, 2010

What I would have done with either 1 or 1B was I would have gotten low, really low, then shot it with a shallow depth of field so that you could only see a hint of the motorcycles in the background in the form of blur with the focus on the stripes. #11 has potential but needs some work like the tall plant in the foreground needs to go, then it needs some vignetting so that the mountains on the left become a bit less dominent or even better if reshoot is possible and you have some room to move to your right, shoot wider such that you don't even capture the mountains yet looking at the field the way you are now (straight on).

WhatSheSaw · July 25, 2010

Thanks for the feedback, Nightpixels, ic4u, and Karl! I really appreciate it.

I think I will be unable to reshoot #1 at this point. The motorcycles won't be there on Sunday.

I may be able to get a shot of the field towards sunset, but I am leaning away from this one because jwear has a field shot in the gallery already.

I think I'm going to go to the beach and see if I can find something (and just to go to the beach

). If not, I will enter 1B and call it a day.

lkbart · July 25, 2010

I'm probably in left field, but I really like #8 Striated. The colors, the swirls, the irridescence - would get my vote.

WhatSheSaw · July 26, 2010

Thanks, lkbart! I like Striated and the other abstracts, too. I ended up going with 1B, because I got good reactions to it and it was different from the other entries.

WhatSheSaw · July 28, 2010

I was back at the parking garage today and decided to try nightpixels suggestions. Is this any better than my entry?

nightpixels · July 28, 2010

I like the idea, however the message of stripes would be sent stronger if the actual stripes were in focus instead of the handicap sign. But, I like the idea.

WhatSheSaw · July 28, 2010

Thanks, nightpixels! I'll give it another go when I'm there tomorrow.

DSS 55 - First Try

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