Too many pictures, it's hard to say anything worthwhile with so many pictures, and I hardly want to even open a post with 17 shots unless I know I'm in for something great.
Fly away hair in the first few is distracting.
The thumb sucking one creeps me out. Blecch.
Overall, pretty good. Learn to be more self-critical, select them down to fewer shots (like I said above, but this is a different thought), and ask specific questions about your work, or offer more specific information, i.e. what you were trying to accomplish.
Quite the variety in shots. I agree with David that there are too many shots to really critique. Overall I think your lighting and exposures were very good in all but #12, I don't like the shadows on the side of her face but that is probably just a personal preference. The shots with the bag look out of place, I guess I'm looking for some kind of context for her to be dressed like that. Finally in the last shot she looks pretty uncomfortable, kind of a blank expression on her face.
Great shots!
The ones I like are 9,10,15 and the last one.
Nice model. Are all of her tatoos real? The ones on her fingers are really distracting in the laptop pictures.
I love the last one, and the one with the white wall is my favourite.
As the others have said, concentrate one a few of them and give these pictures your whole attention in postprocessing. But I know that making a selection out of a lot of pictures that you like can be very hard!
Too many pictures, it's hard to say anything worthwhile with so many pictures, and I hardly want to even open a post with 17 shots unless I know I'm in for something great.
Some constructive thoughts there, but I think Toine was going for a bit of story no? We go from "business" to "holy crap look whats under that suit!", right?
Yeah, you could have presented this in less shots, but I'm digging most of them. The b/w conversion is good as well.
Some constructive thoughts there, but I think Toine was going for a bit of story no? We go from "business" to "holy crap look whats under that suit!", right?
Yeah, you could have presented this in less shots, but I'm digging most of them. The b/w conversion is good as well.
Erik -
You got it! This will be a series called "Metamorphosis." It will be five frames:
Frame 1: One of the following: 1,2,3,4,5
Frame 2: One of the following: 6, 7, 8
Frame 3: 9
Frame 4: 10
Frame 5: One of the following: 11,12,13,14,15,16
i love the mirror shot. is there a reason these are in b&w? imo, i don't think that was necessary.
Thanks!
No reason other than that I liked most of them in B&W more than in color. And, it looked odd in a series where one or two were color, and the rest B&W. So, I made them all B&W.
I loved everything about this series. Technically the shots all look really good. The lighting and B&W treatments are also very nice. The girl is lovely and she has a very expressive face. She was a great choice for this story
Like Doc, I got it from the beginning. Although 17 images is quite a lot for one post, I was entertained throughout and can't think of one pic (or part of the story) I'd have left out.
A thoroughly enjoyable series and thanks for sharing it with us
First real shoot..
This is your first shoot? Excellent!!!
My only coments are:
#2 seems cut off to me, perhaps a vertical crop would better present the subject.
The facial shadows in 10,11,12, & 16 are a bit muddy and distracting from the subject. A little Kick light would firm the shadows and add three demensions to theses 4 images.
#14, with your apparant intended mood captured and presented, is excellent.
#2 seems cut off to me, perhaps a vertical crop would better present the subject.
The facial shadows in 10,11,12, & 16 are a bit muddy and distracting from the subject. A little Kick light would firm the shadows and add three demensions to theses 4 images.
#14, with your apparant intended mood captured and presented, is excellent.
Regards, Nichoas
Nichoas (or is it Nicholas),
Thanks for your comments. I actually made the shadows a bit more defined on 12 and 16 to portray a mood. On 11, I turned it into Rembrandt lighting (or, that's what I hope I did ). As for 10, I used a reflector, and a fill, but couldn't get that shadow gone without the reflector or strobe showing in the mirror. I didn't have a lot more space to move her around, without seeing my kitchen in the mirror
14 was a lot of work to shoot, it is a 1s exposure, and she needed to stand *really* still
Hi, debtoine
Was it the models first real photo shoot?
Is she available for photo shoots?
I liked these photos the best 1, 2, 5, 9, 10 & 17.
Keep up the good work.
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Great shots!
The ones I like are 9,10,15 and the last one.
Nice model. Are all of her tatoos real? The ones on her fingers are really distracting in the laptop pictures.
I love the last one, and the one with the white wall is my favourite.
As the others have said, concentrate one a few of them and give these pictures your whole attention in postprocessing. But I know that making a selection out of a lot of pictures that you like can be very hard!
Yeah, you could have presented this in less shots, but I'm digging most of them. The b/w conversion is good as well.
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Erik -
You got it! This will be a series called "Metamorphosis." It will be five frames:
Frame 1: One of the following: 1,2,3,4,5
Frame 2: One of the following: 6, 7, 8
Frame 3: 9
Frame 4: 10
Frame 5: One of the following: 11,12,13,14,15,16
17 was just for fun
Toine
Thanks!
No reason other than that I liked most of them in B&W more than in color. And, it looked odd in a series where one or two were color, and the rest B&W. So, I made them all B&W.
Toine
Sam
Thanks! :)I had fun shooting it!
Toine
I think she'd make a great suicide girl
I had fun looking at these!
Thanks!
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I really like 9, 10, and 17. Nunber 17 is a very creative shot - outstanding.
I loved everything about this series. Technically the shots all look really good. The lighting and B&W treatments are also very nice. The girl is lovely and she has a very expressive face. She was a great choice for this story
Like Doc, I got it from the beginning. Although 17 images is quite a lot for one post, I was entertained throughout and can't think of one pic (or part of the story) I'd have left out.
A thoroughly enjoyable series and thanks for sharing it with us
Steve
Thanks for your nice comments.
The series as I put it together:
http://www.dstl.com/joie/metamorphosis.jpg (large: 1280px wide)
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Thank you for your comments !
Toine
This is your first shoot? Excellent!!!
My only coments are:
#2 seems cut off to me, perhaps a vertical crop would better present the subject.
The facial shadows in 10,11,12, & 16 are a bit muddy and distracting from the subject. A little Kick light would firm the shadows and add three demensions to theses 4 images.
#14, with your apparant intended mood captured and presented, is excellent.
Regards, Nichoas
Nichoas (or is it Nicholas),
Thanks for your comments. I actually made the shadows a bit more defined on 12 and 16 to portray a mood. On 11, I turned it into Rembrandt lighting (or, that's what I hope I did
14 was a lot of work to shoot, it is a 1s exposure, and she needed to stand *really* still
T
Was it the models first real photo shoot?
Is she available for photo shoots?
I liked these photos the best 1, 2, 5, 9, 10 & 17.
Keep up the good work.
Take Care,
Chuck
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