Opinions Please: Communication 7

dlplumer

Cafe Conveyance







What do you think?

jeffmeyers

I like the second one better, Dan. You cropped out the annoying paper thingy on the table in the foreground.

Tango

not that i dont like the shot, but i think the lone man with the laptop is the subject and all the other people distract from him....

nice setting.

Tango

or why not fill the room with laptop users

richtersl

I like the second one better as well. You might want to consider cropping it a bit more from the left to make those phantom hands and the notebook go away.

dlplumer

OK, so maybe I start over, but I was trying to show all the people "communicating" in different ways. One person on a laptop, would just not do that.

Tango

if thats your idea why not run with it? why start over? i think the internet cafe is a great idea...wish i'd thought of it...

i was just throwing out some options...

so if you throw this out can i have the internet cafe idea?:D

dlplumer

AaronNelson wrote:

if thats your idea why not run with it? why start over? i think the internet cafe is a great idea...wish i'd thought of it...

i was just throwing out some options...

so if you throw this out can i have the internet cafe idea?:D

Can I have your new camera

Tango

what about if you want many conversations go there when its packed full of people....

dlplumer

It seems like a good theme worthy idea to me (communication cafe), but as my daughter points out, the shot simply lacks artistic flair.

Nikolai

#2, I'd crop it even more though...

Halite

dlplumer wrote:

It seems like a good theme worthy idea to me (communication cafe), but as my daughter points out, the shot simply lacks artistic flair.

Agree, you've got a great concept and time to work it better. Good luck!

Giphsub

Halite wrote:

Agree, you've got a great concept and time to work it better. Good luck!

Good concept, but this one falls ever so slightly short. The other conversations didn't jump out at me on first look, only the laptop guy. Good luck with it Dan!

shoppix

cafe communication
DAn - concept is great. You show 3 forms of communication. I agree with your daughter that 'something' is missing, artistically. Visit at different time of day, perhaps. Think you just have to be a'lurker' for awhile! and Keep shootin'.

steve

dlplumer

Thanks everyone. Back to the drawing board I go. :ivar

tlee

dlplumer wrote:

OK, so maybe I start over, but I was trying to show all the people "communicating" in different ways. One person on a laptop, would just not do that.

I got the concept you were after--I like the second crop, but do agree cropping out the phontom hands and laptop might be a good idea.

dlplumer

Thanks, I went with a different concept: Reaching Out. Let me know what you think.

shoppix

giraff - "communicating"
Feeding giraff is obviously 'reaching out' but not really 'communicating'. The coffe shop illustrates 'communicating', in a few ways, without saying it.

Go back, find a time, maybe evening, when it is busy/packed.

dlplumer

shoppix wrote:

Feeding giraff is obviously 'reaching out' but not really 'communicating'. The coffe shop illustrates 'communicating', in a few ways, without saying it.

Go back, find a time, maybe evening, when it is busy/packed.

Too late for that, but thanx.

BOATS

alcolades
there were a lot of shots that were excelent here are my top 7 in no particular order. { excluding my own because i like it already}

62 - lack of
61 - back off
48 - soldiers letters
42 - last hope
33 - tower to tower
21 - horse whisperer
9 - intouch

BOATS

critique - help me learn thanks
any and all help would be appreciated - thanks in advance

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