Request Feedback on 1st #14 Attempt

slpollett

Hi everybody! I haven't been around much in the last couple of months. I've just been too busy, but I found myself with some free time this weekend and decided to try this week's challenge.

I know I still need to work on the lighting. I do not have any off camera lighting equipment so lighting is really a challenge for me. Any suggestions here are appreciated!!

What do you think of the composition? Is it better with the eraser or not? Am I even on the right, er 'write' track??

I'm thinking of calling my entry "The Write Stuff."

#1


#2 (just slightly different from the first)


3.


Thanks for looking and commenting.

Sherry

divamum

I think it's a brilliant idea! I like #2 the best.

The only suggestion would be to possibly check the white balance and reshoot - they're all looking a little blue on my screen (although #2 is the best on that score)

Great idea - definitely worth developing IMO!

richtersl

divamum wrote:

I think it's a brilliant idea! I like #2 the best.

The only suggestion would be to possibly check the white balance and reshoot - they're all looking a little blue on my screen (although #2 is the best on that score)

Great idea - definitely worth developing IMO!

eoren1

Great idea. Agree about the WB. My vote is for #3
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slpollett

Thanks all for the feedback. I knew I needed to adjust the WB (I didn't like the blue cast either) so I will try it again today. I also think I may break one of the pencil points.

I still can't decide if I like it better with the eraser or without it. I may end up flipping a coin!

Sherry

Tylwydd

I prefer the #3. The eraser adds something to composition and the almost deleted word makes the picture more interesting imo.

swintonphoto

This is a clever idea. I think if you want to put the eraser into it maybe make it fill a bit more of the frame. It seems a bit unbalanced as the only pinkish colored thing in the frame on the edge of the frame.
Great idea!

achambers

You might also try 'Dear Santa, define good.'

slpollett

achambers wrote:

You might also try 'Dear Santa, define good.'

I had also thought about 'Dear Santa, I TRIED to be good!'

I even considered a different set-up with 'Dear John' but I figured this close to the holidays I didn't want to be mean!