Behind The Window

dlplumer

I am considering entering this shot in the curreent DSS Challenge and would appreciate any and all feedback and coaching.

Thanks,

Dan



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Entrance

jeffreaux2

The entrance seems a bit busy, but the window.....


Its nice and sharp!, and I like the colors....the cool blue and the warmth of the wood.


Three issues that could improve:

-There is some distortion due to the camera angle. A perspective correction in photoshop would fix it well...as it isn't extreme.

-I would definately like to see some of the blue wall beyond the eindow ledge. It seems amputated as is.

-The composition doesn't grab me. I think if you put more of the wall in the composition...a lot more.....you could have a stronger image, especially if it were as least roughly based on the rule of thirds.

It is an interesting window, and the blue wall unique. I do think it might be worth further experimentation.

As an aside, I had an engagement session this week with a young couple. During that shoot I also used a window and wall as part of a silloutte. My subject, was their shadow....rather than the window, but the placement may help you as you experiment with composition choices.

Here's mine.

dlplumer

Thanks Jeff. Appreciate the coaching and the sharing.

schmoo

Hi Dan,

I prefer the first because of its simplicity, and you still have plenty of color and detail in it. The second is definitely an eye-catching scene but a bit busy. Good luck and I think these are gorgeous windows.

kdog

schmoo wrote:

I prefer the first because of its simplicity, and you still have plenty of color and detail in it.

I agree. Colors in #2 are great, but prefer the comp in #1. Good stuff!

-joel

hawkeye978

#1 for me also. I like the simplicity and the nice detail showing up in the wood. The greenery in the background also brings a nice bit of interest. I almost wish the door were a little more open.

Abiciriderback

Really like #1 the best the texture and the color of the wood is very appealing. I personally would want the doors open just a little more to expose more of the background. I personally would also crop the foreground right to the start of the cement and eliminate the foreground border.

Ray Still

dlplumer

Did what I could on # 2 based upon comments. What do you think?

Thanks

Shootin1st

I like this one better mostly because with the looser (not loser ) crop you can tell it's a window, not a door.

Excellent!

daveman

agree

Shootin1st wrote:

I like this one better mostly because with the looser (not loser ) crop you can tell it's a window, not a door.

Excellent!

I agree- the second cropped like this is better - it shows what you are looking at.

I think you could really improve on your second shot above - of the door, if you cropped it so the edges are the purple wall on both sides - and use transform tool in PS to reduce the distortion. Just a thought - let me know if this not clear and you want me to show you what I am thinking.