A Little Noir

LlywellynLlywellyn Registered Users, Retired Mod Posts: 3,186 Major grins
edited April 18, 2009 in People
Had a photoshoot last weekend and am still going through the photos, but I'm happy to have found a good use for the creepy stairwells in my community. :D

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Thanks for stopping by! :thumb

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  • ruttrutt Registered Users Posts: 6,511 Major grins
    edited April 16, 2009
    This works. To be picky, I think you have focus on the brick wall in back and not her face.

    The elements are very interesting and I had to think about how I might have changed the composition, not because there is anything wrong with it, but because it was fun to think about how it might be changed and what it would look like.

    So it made me think, which is really good.
    If not now, when?
  • NeilLNeilL Registered Users Posts: 4,201 Major grins
    edited April 16, 2009
    What an inspiration!thumb.gif

    There is much to be liked in it as it is. It is certainly noirish, as well as a little oirish of course!mwink.gif

    Following the precedence of rutt, my mind has also been stirred, and if I may I'd like to think out loud -

    an interesting viewpoint would be a couple of steps to the right and on your knees, the camera angled up towards the top left corner, asymmetrical and a little skewed

    the plastic pipes don't play the game, clone them out

    remove the flowerpot and put down real detritus

    grunge the walls hard

    burn the top couple steps

    extract all you can from that deep shaft of light spotting her

    a little fill flash on the face, shoulders and those(*!), ah, bosoms:whew

    and well, I'll have to take a rest ...! mwink.gif


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  • dlplumerdlplumer Registered Users Posts: 8,081 Major grins
    edited April 16, 2009
    Very provocative and sexy Kerry.thumb.gifthumb.gifthumb.gif
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  • heatherfeatherheatherfeather Registered Users Posts: 2,738 Major grins
    edited April 16, 2009
    O phew... I am glad to see you are still shooting without the challenge incentive.

    Love this, especially her expression and eyes. She has that startled "doe eyed" look that is so adorable. Dorthy... Auntie Em... that sort of thing. What a fun model!
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  • NikolaiNikolai Registered Users Posts: 19,035 Major grins
    edited April 16, 2009
    Very interesting, Kerry! thumb.gif
    You're definitely becoming "Noir Queen of Dgrin" mwink.gifbowdown.gif
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  • whitericewhiterice Registered Users Posts: 555 Major grins
    edited April 16, 2009
    Very nice Kerry! This image has so much feeling...just love it.

    15524779-Ti.gif with all the suggestions from the experts above.mwink.gif
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  • AgnieszkaAgnieszka Registered Users, Retired Mod Posts: 3,263 Major grins
    edited April 16, 2009
    Very nice photo. Love how the light frames her clap.gif
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  • LlywellynLlywellyn Registered Users, Retired Mod Posts: 3,186 Major grins
    edited April 16, 2009
    Oh, goodness, thank you for all the kind words! iloveyou.gif And for the critiques. clap.gif

    I did try to reposition myself (low, high, left, right), but I was triggering my SB800 with my pop-up flash (since I'm still PW- and Radiopopper-less), and if I moved one step to the left or right, or kneeled, my SB800 wouldn't pop. rolleyes1.gif Frustrating to say the least.

    Heather: this model had the most amazing, huge eyes! It was quite startling to see after she had applied her makeup and removed her glasses. :D
  • divamumdivamum Registered Users Posts: 9,021 Major grins
    edited April 16, 2009
    Very noir! My only thought might be to clone out those two PVC drainpipes - somehow they bring us back to the new millenium instead of the 1940s. Hardly a dealbreaker, but just a thought...

    I LOVE what you get out of these themed shoots of yours clap.gifclapclap.gif
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  • LlywellynLlywellyn Registered Users, Retired Mod Posts: 3,186 Major grins
    edited April 16, 2009
    Heh, yes, there's consensus on those pipes. I do plan to clone them out, but I was just plain lazy in wanting to process something quickly. lol3.gif
  • LlywellynLlywellyn Registered Users, Retired Mod Posts: 3,186 Major grins
    edited April 17, 2009
    Got off my lazy duff and re-edited this photo based on feedback. Thanks so much, folks! iloveyou.gif

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  • glennpglennp Registered Users Posts: 171 Major grins
    edited April 17, 2009
    Love the edited version. Well done.
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  • ruttrutt Registered Users Posts: 6,511 Major grins
    edited April 17, 2009
    And I was liking those drainpipes. They point at her.
    If not now, when?
  • NikolaiNikolai Registered Users Posts: 19,035 Major grins
    edited April 17, 2009
    rutt wrote:
    And I was liking those drainpipes. They point at her.
    +1 15524779-Ti.gif
    Afterall, it's a grunge setup, you can't expect it to be sqweeky clean and picture perfect ne_nau.gif
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  • NeilLNeilL Registered Users Posts: 4,201 Major grins
    edited April 17, 2009
    No, no, no, you guys!!! The pipes had to go.deal.gif

    But that flower pot is drivin' me tangled!:D I got a fix on it but still waitin' for KE to pull tha trigger!:D

    MOAR GRUNGE! MOAR GRUNGE! LET THERE BE GRUNGE!

    And a little fill flash on the face, shoulders, and the ... the ... well, I won't mention THOSE again!mwink.gifwinkmwink.gif

    hehehe...

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  • LlywellynLlywellyn Registered Users, Retired Mod Posts: 3,186 Major grins
    edited April 17, 2009
    Can't please everyone, eh? lol3.gif My original intent was to take the pipes out because they were bright white (I burned them in a ton) and drove me nuts. I got lazy and talked myself into keeping them because I'd burned them enough so they subtly pointed to the model. But I still hate the PVC. If they were metal pipes, I may have kept them in, but I'm kind'a diggin' this sans pipe.

    And I like that random pot, so it stays! mwink.gif I've brought in as much fill as I like to highlight her face and assets (they're definitely brighter than the first version). blbl.gif

    'Course, finicky as I am, I may redo it all again tomorrow. rolleyes1.gif
  • AndyAndy Registered Users Posts: 50,016 Major grins
    edited April 17, 2009
    rutt wrote:
    And I was liking those drainpipes. They point at her.
    nod.gifnod.gif
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  • PhotosbychuckPhotosbychuck Registered Users Posts: 1,239 Major grins
    edited April 17, 2009
    Great Photo & can't wait to see more...clap.gif

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  • divamumdivamum Registered Users Posts: 9,021 Major grins
    edited April 17, 2009
    Llywellyn wrote:
    But I still hate the PVC. If they were metal pipes, I may have kept them in, but I'm kind'a diggin' this sans pipe.

    EXACTLY. It wasn't their presence that bothered me, but their plastic-ness.

    I love this photo, Kerry, avec ou sans pipes. Great job! thumb.gif
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  • NeilLNeilL Registered Users Posts: 4,201 Major grins
    edited April 18, 2009
    Gawd struth!
    Pipes "pointing"????. The nuances of PVC versus metal???? Blushing caresses of fill flash on certain curvy parts of the anotomy????...

    Yous all reminiscent of that cerebrally precious artsy-*artsy poster with the big words and the boring theories of aesthetics, what's his name...?:D

    Don't yous know nuttin'?! Noir is not subtle, guys, it's the shadow of the subtlety of color, it's win or lose, live or die, love or loneliness, black and white...! Noir glares, white cuts black, black cuts white, it's a battlefield, the living and the dead are covered with the white sheets under a streetlight at the bottom of a black alley...
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