DSS 27 - Latest Attempt

anonymouscuban

OK... so still haven't had the opportunity to venture someplace to shoot so I grabbed another shot from the bachyard. I took the advice from the other thread I started and shot a white flower. This is a fortnight lilly.

Let me know what you think...

JAG

oh that is soo lovely! White works much much better! My only suggestion would to be play with the crop a little and see if you can come up with a different perspective.....like if your going to use the negative space on the right...maybe crop in tight on the left and see if 3/4 of the flower works....like zooming in if its a large file. Just to experiment. But I so like this one better than all the others you posted!

travelways

I would like to see more details and textures on the flower...

richtersl

I like this one much better than your other attempts. Your conversion looks really good. But like Tatiana, I would like to see some more detail in the flower. You can try experimenting with an unsharp mask: try a setting of 20/50/0 and see if you like the result.

anonymouscuban

Great feedback... definitely stuff I can work on. I took a couple more shots this morning of this flower which I will proces and post later this afternoon; the shot I was working with here was hand held so couldn't pull the detail needed due to a bit of blur. The new shots were all from a tripod.

However, here is a shot I got of my youngest male pug Meatball chewing on his favorite toy, which he is completely obsessed with. Two conversion treatments. I kind of like the first one better. I call this "1-dog, 1-bone".

Yes? No? Maybe? Stick with the flower?

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bf2015

Definitely white flowers. I like this better than the first set you posted on the other thread. I agree though...see if you can bring out some more detail.

Love the pug shot. I like the first one better as well. His coat is better exposed and not blown out.

anonymouscuban

OK... Updates to white flowers based on your suggestions
I know I said I wouldn't have time to work on the new shots till this afternoon but I just couldn't help myself. I was late to work but at least I got my priorities straight.

So this is the same flower as in my first post, but a reshoot. I used a tripod this time to get some sharp detail. I pretty much did the B&W conversion identicle to the first one, but I sharpened it a bit more in LR2. I also gave it a bit of a bump in the Clarity slider to up the local contrast. Hopefully this has brought the detail out that you all were asking for. I made a few different crops. I have a favorite but I want to hear what you guys think. Please ignore the artifacts in the BG; I will take care of those later.

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WhatSheSaw

I like #4 best. I might like it even better a little closer.

lightdrunk

Love the dog. I like the flower, too, but I agree with others that you could bring out the details in the petals.

Katmitchell

Hey Cuban..

I am "really" liking #4.... you are getting there bro... You are starting to nail the composition in this one...

I have to say it is beautiful and boasts a powerful presence too..

Looks like the sharpness is coming along to give more detail..


The pug is totally cute, and it is a great black and white, but does not have the impact of the flower.


Kat

bf2015

I agree with Kat. You're definitely getting there. I too like #4. Composition I hate to sound like Christopher Walken in the SNL skit, but "I need more cowbell!" in terms of sharpness (just a little bit more).:D