First Thought on DSS#29

KevXman

There's no reshoot possibility on this one but wanted to hear your thoughts.

Swan Lake - Lyrics Here



Thanks for looking.
— Kevin

Katmitchell

Hi Kevin..

Awesome Capture.. I would mask in a few of those tall reeds of grass on the right so that the composition can "flow", and that one on the swan's tail on the left..


Other than that.. simply gorgeous and it fits your title to the "T"


Beautiful Photo

Kat

ic4u

Katmitchell wrote:

Hi Kevin..

Awesome Capture.. I would mask in a few of those tall reeds of grass on the right so that the composition can "flow", and that one on the swan's tail on the left..


Other than that.. simply gorgeous and it fits your title to the "T"


Beautiful Photo

Kat

....this is really a beautiful capture.
I agree with Kat's suggestions

nightpixels

oooh, I love it Kevin! Really well shot. Kat has some nice suggestions for improving it. Overall, awesome

dlplumer

I really like it Kevin The only thing I could suggest to improve it might be for you to clone in a catch-light into the eye of the swan in the foreground.

karlabbott

You don't need anyone else telling you how nice this is, but it's truly one of those captures that catches the eye and has you looking at it for minutes instead of just glancing at it and moving along. Great work!

richtersl

I can hear the music
Lovely capture, Kevin. How did you get them to pose for you like that?

Seriously, what's not to like about this? It's gorgeous. Composition is good, love the reflections and the way the swan in the foreground seems to be looking at his.

But can you spell Tchaikovsky?

divamum

Beautiful, beautiful shot (as always). But Swan Lake simply isn't a song but a ballet, and no matter how hard you hit it, doesn't have words and isn't a vocal piece (unless there's something out there that uses the title I don't know about). Thus I have to question therefore whether it's on theme...

Sorry to preach, but this is a particular pet-peeve of my husband's and mine, so apologies if it seems somewhat hardlined. We spend many hours teaching our college-aged students that a SONG is a piece of music performed by a singer, with words and usually (although not always) accompanied by piano, guitar or lute. If it's in an opera or oratorio with orchestra accompaniment, it's an aria. It's not a movement of a symphony, a section of a string quartet or anything else. If it doesn't have words (and isn't specifically indicated by the composer as a "song without words") and isn't performed by a voice... it's not a song.

/soapbox

Sorry, that wasn't for you Kev, as much as me proselytizing at large (probably to the converted!). Sorry. It's one of those classical-musician hair-trigger reaction things

Tango

thats a nice capture, the lower right area kinda distracts me with the two OOF blades leaning to the right, but i dont have any suggestion other than try some cloning...
maybe clean up little pieces of floating stuff out in the water too.

anyway, where's the castle refection?:D

KevXman

Thanks for the comments everyone. I will work on them in case I end up sticking with this image.

Divamum, you're right about it technically not being a song and there was no insult taken with you getting on your soapbox. However, if I refer to this version, will you let me fudge it?

— Kevin

divamum

KevXman wrote:

Thanks for the comments everyone. I will work on them in case I end up sticking with this image.

Divamum, you're right about it technically not being a song and there was no insult taken with you getting on your soapbox. However, if I refer to this version, will you let me fudge it?

— Kevin

Like I said, if there's something out there that's used the title (which clearly there is), then you're totally good to go!!!! (I'd add that link to your caption, however - may as well!)

Thanks for taking it in the spirit meant - it's one of these pushbutton annoyances with our students, who can't seem to grasp that not EVERY piece of music ever written in any genre for any instrument or group of instruments is NOT A SONG (I swear, even "track" bothers us less. My husband is even worse than I am - he tells his classes up front that if they use the word "song" incorrectly in any written work they will automatically be docked one letter grade )

KevXman

divamum wrote:

Like I said, if there's something out there that's used the title (which clearly there is), then you're totally good to go!!!! (I'd add that link to your caption, however - may as well!)

Done. I understand where you are coming from. Being a graphic designer at an engineering firm I have this Dilbert strip prominently displayed. (With apologies to Scott Adams.)

Katmitchell

divamum wrote:

Beautiful, beautiful shot (as always). But Swan Lake simply isn't a song but a ballet, and no matter how hard you hit it, doesn't have words and isn't a vocal piece (unless there's something out there that uses the title I don't know about). Thus I have to question therefore whether it's on theme...

Sorry to preach, but this is a particular pet-peeve of my husband's and mine, so apologies if it seems somewhat hardlined. We spend many hours teaching our college-aged students that a SONG is a piece of music performed by a singer, with words and usually (although not always) accompanied by piano, guitar or lute. If it's in an opera or oratorio with orchestra accompaniment, it's an aria. It's not a movement of a symphony, a section of a string quartet or anything else. If it doesn't have words (and isn't specifically indicated by the composer as a "song without words") and isn't performed by a voice... it's not a song.

/soapbox

Sorry, that wasn't for you Kev, as much as me proselytizing at large (probably to the converted!). Sorry. It's one of those classical-musician hair-trigger reaction things

Your cracking me up here Diva...:lol4uh.. Bummer, there goes my idea of Vivaldi's Four Season's....he he he....

You guys dock a whole grade level? Man,, talk about strict..:whip


I can't believe you actually found a lyrical version Kevin. .. Is lyrical a word?

Love that Dilbert strip, too funny.. I come from a family of engineers, and used to recruit engineers for a living, so I know what you mean there.. My dad is one of those know it all engineers.. They are awesome in a jam and can design the most awesome machines to get a company out of a fix, but when it comes to artistic flair,,...........

that's a another story, but try telling them that..rolleyes.... superior minds they have....:D

KevXman

How's this for the redo?

Original



Reworked



Thanks for looking.
— Kevin

dlplumer

Tango

all the blades you cloned out need to be natural sharp on the ends..
otherwise I love your re-work.

also IMO bring back the 3 tall ones on the right side.....

whiterice

Very nice work Kev - this looks so good in B/W!

Katmitchell

Perfecto Kevin, but what happened to the natural glow and light on the water?

If you compare the two you will see what I mean.

richtersl

Love the rework, Kevin!

Also have a song title for you based on this little gem from the movie, "Hans Christian Anderson": http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WMKxnYRhk6I

If you remember Blood, Sweat, & Tears, you'll remember this!

KevXman

richtersl wrote:

Love the rework, Kevin!

Also have a song title for you based on this little gem from the movie, "Hans Christian Anderson": http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WMKxnYRhk6I

If you remember Blood, Sweat, & Tears, you'll remember this!

Yeah, that's a good one. Always like watching Danny Kaye. Especially in the comedies.

Okay, I think I have this one where it should be. Thanks for the help. Any last thing that I might have missed?



Thanks again for looking.
— Kevin

Tango

I think you have done great man! personally i do think those three blades on the right look good to the composition, glad you brought them back. The reflection upon the water is a good call too....

good luck.

Katmitchell

Well, we all know you have to make the call on it in the end Kevin, and we all know your a rebel...:): but I am going to be a stickler and stand my ground on those grass reeds. I think the first revision looks best without them.. :poke

dnie

ok, I gotta say....
I kinda like them there reeds on the right.:D

travelways

dnie wrote:

ok, I gotta say....
I kinda like them there reeds on the right.:D

I like them too - they make the frame more complete.

and... I actually liked your original better.

Hmm - I originally had the same idea of a subject, but all I could find were some geese...