Mongrel's preliminary shots...

Mongrel

Hi Gang, since I blew the timeframe on the last challenge I decided to start a bit earlier this time around

Three variations on my 'Movie Title' idea...

BLACKBOARD JUNGLE.....

#1




#2



#3



Curious what everyone thinks-yes? no? maybe? :rolleyes :dunno

These aren't the finalized idea (can't give it *all* away :rofl ), but it's the direction I'm going.

Any feedback is appreciated :thumb

Take care,

Mongrel

gus

#1 for me mate. Is that you in the shot ?

Gus

adrian_k

3rd one for sure.
Although the head is disembodied, the lack of detail at the bottom of the shot, just not seeing your(?) body is odd.
I'd also loose the flag, it's too distracting, it takes alot away from you (unless of course you are commenting on US high schools only).

Mongrel wrote:

Hi Gang, since I blew the timeframe on the last challenge I decided to start a bit earlier this time around

Three variations on my 'Movie Title' idea...

BLACKBOARD JUNGLE.....

#3



Curious what everyone thinks-yes? no? maybe?

These aren't the finalized idea (can't give it *all* away ), but it's the direction I'm going.

Any feedback is appreciated

Take care,

Mongrel

behr655

I like the 1st one. Is that guy smoking on school property? :uhoh

Bear

Mongrel

Yep...
that's me Gus

Humungus wrote:

#1 for me mate. Is that you in the shot ?

Gus

Mongrel

adrian_k wrote:

3rd one for sure.
Although the head is disembodied, the lack of detail at the bottom of the shot, just not seeing your(?) body is odd.
I'd also loose the flag, it's too distracting, it takes alot away from you (unless of course you are commenting on US high schools only).

Thanks for the input Adrian. I'm working out the details on the disembodied head thing. This was done as an exposure test.

Re: Flag...

Blackboard Jungle was a movie made in 1955 about our *troubled* youth and violence in schools. The school in the movie was in NYC. I thought the flag helped add to the context and to clarify that this was a classroom (which in fact it is...). I did try cropping it out, but honestly liked the flag in the shot.

Thanks again for your comments,

Mongrel

Mongrel

Bear, surely you don't think that's
a *real* cigarette? Stage prop my friend, just a stage prop

Thanks for your input

behr655 wrote:

I like the 1st one. Is that guy smoking on school property? :uhoh

Bear

Angelo

Mongrel - I've returned to this a couple of times now... there's a LOT I like about this but something bothers me about the object in the foreground. Is that an overturned desk? it's legs in the air forming a sort of "V"? I find it distracting.

I like the flag, I like #1 best (if you can deal with the "disembodied head" a bit better)

nice go

Mongrel

Hi Angelo!
Thanks for stopping by, I appreciate your input and suggestions.

The object in the foreground is my attempt at suggesting the classroom had been ransacked. I guess it didn't work

I'm still working on whether or not to add the 'person' to the shot or take him out completely

stay tuned......

Thanks again for taking the time to stop by, I appreciate it

erich6

I like the first one best. It's a really great image. I'm sure it will do well in the contest.

Erich

Mongrel

Erich,
Thank you for the kind words, I really appreciate it.

Take care,

Mongrel