#31 C&c

bf2015

C&C please.

I was thinking the title would be something like "Closed to Production". Ideas on a title? I still have a little masking to do around the tree line (there was a black chainlink fence and some cranes around the site that I had to take out.)

WhatSheSaw

I like it. How about 'Mothballed' for a title?

Katmitchell

I have a question first.

Is this a composite entry?


Kat

leaforte

Katmitchell wrote:

I have a question first.

Is this a composite entry?


Kat

Times two.

bf2015

Nope. Single shot.

Katmitchell

Ok, I was wondering because of the tree line.. there is something there that I cannot put my finger one.. help..

The only thing that bothers me is the "wow" in it.. it looks like it is dipping down in the middle.. why? is it the lens?

I would take it into PS and use the lens distortion tool to fix that..

But then I am thinking maybe it is an optical illusion from the hill?

I think you need to sharpen the metal up and give it some punch...

I can see what you are shooting for as far as theme here...

I also wanted to point out the pink fringing in the sky, did you notice that?

Sorry for all of the questions... scratch

oh yeah.. and where on earth have you been lately? Have not seen ya around Brian

Kat

bf2015

It's an HDR. As you can see below, I had to mask out some things which I haven't finished yet. The tree line is one of the things I still need to work on. I see what you're talking about with the sky. I'll try to fix that. I think the sinking might be an optical illusion, but I'll play around with the lense distortion some and see.

I've been busy getting my climbing in while the weather out here is good.

Katmitchell

I bet you have been having fun too any new shots from that?


ok,, I see now what is going on.. wow dude.. that is a lot of work!!!

I think the color of the building is better in this original.. too much green cast on the metal in the edited one.. and I would keep the blue sky in the original too, me no likey the purple sky and I think it is this purple that is causing the fringing.

I will keep my eye on the board tomorrow in case you post again.

Good Luck Brian; and Nice to See You Around Again..

Kat

leaforte

Very surreal, effective look. Good eye.

bf2015

Ok. I basically re-did the entire PP. Soooo....

Here is the rework: (Does it even fit the theme?) Title??




And for those that like the side by sides:



I kept the original (which still needs work) just because it has a "different" feel to it; "surreal" as leaforte pointed out. (BTW - This is Gasworks Park in Seattle. It's an old refinery pretty much in the middle of the city.)

adbsgicom

When I looked at this, it looked like the machine was planting trees behind it -- some sort of bizzare machine from a Hayao Miyazaki film. On that front

I'm not sure it says closed per-se. But you could call it something like 'end of the line' to convey its closure and play up the way it blends so perfectly into the tree line.

Katmitchell

adbsgicom wrote:

When I looked at this, it looked like the machine was planting trees behind it -- some sort of bizzare machine from a Hayao Miyazaki film. On that front

I'm not sure it says closed per-se. But you could call it something like 'end of the line' to convey its closure and play up the way it blends so perfectly into the tree line.

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Too funny.. I agree.. I knew it reminded me of something familiar yet out of place.... Hayao Miyazaki !!!


Brian the edit looks much better. I am not seeing the fringing in the sky anymore and I think the metal looks much better without the green cast..

As far as strong on theme, well, without the title you gave it, I did not see how it fit the theme, so I think that if you're going to use it, then the title is going to be very important...

You asked about if it fit the theme ok, so does that mean you have other shots for this theme too?

Kat

bf2015

No. I haven't really had time lately to come up with anything else.

Katmitchell

Well sometimes, you gotta just go with what you have had time to shoot..

I am just happy your back in the game..


SO, I think it is down to the title on this one.. Any ideas?

bf2015

Not sure. "End of the Line", "Mothballed". How about "Closing a Can of Worms". "Closed for Cleanup"?

Katmitchell

hmmm...that is tough Brian.. I want to think metal graveyard or something like that, but it looks like it is sitting in paradise rather than an abandoned graveyard..

End of the line is great..thumb

I don't understand the mothballed one..

or how about Abandoned Giant.. or use the word forgotten or something like that.. something to make it feel forgotten or abandoned helps to drive home the point of "closed"

The more I think on End of the Line.. the more I like it..

WhatSheSaw

I like the rework better. I think the fence in the original says closed to me more than without it. The blue equipment in the original is a distraction, so I'd say good idea to leave that out.

How about Gasworks Park for a title? That also says closed to me, but maybe just because I am in the Seattle area.

bf2015

Maybe "End of an Era" or "Put Out to Pasture".

"Sign of the Times"


This is a hard one.

WhatSheSaw

Based on the surrounding field, I think Put Out to Pasture is a good one.

Katmitchell

Put out to Pasture is perfect... IMHO

bf2015

Thanks all!