Beginners Attempt

raingirl

hi! this is my first attempt of doing a photoshoot with a "model". these are photos of my friend Tanika i took a couple of weeks ago. critique welcome.

Mr. Quiet

Not bed......

1....it makes her look 11 or 13.....

2...is by far the best. Did she purposely let her left strap fall? If she or you did, that does not go with her expression....Maybe you could tune the light down a bit?

Did you get a DSLR yet?

rhondavid

How old is she? Poses tend to be more adult like and she looks pretty young (tweener) Precious girl, love the freckles.

May be my monitor, of time it is, but the white balance and colors just to not appear right especially compared to the other shots.

Scott_Quier

No question, #2 is the best of the lot.

It's nice to see you back again!

Some things to think about:

• Eye contact is usually, but not always a good thing. Compare the viewer's involvment in #4 with the others.
• I like how, in #1, you've pretty much followed the "rule", "If it bends, bend it," even to the point of the tilted line of the shoulders. I think #1 would have been improved by turning her about 45° to her right and then lifting her left knee rather than her right .... maybe?
• Love the eye contact in #4. Moving the hair from her left eye would have increased this .... but that's a taste thing. This is a fun shot. Do you know what caused the perspective distortion? Was it done intentionally?

raingirl

yay, by the way tanika's 12. (mwhahah i'm older!)

adbsgicom

2 is best pose and color IMO.
The perspective on 4 is a bit too much for my taste, but it may be what you wanted. The skin tones are bit blue here, warm it up, you may like it more.