DSS 42 C&C please- next attempt

tinamarie52

I shot these at the city park/lake. I haven't been able to actually shoot on the street yet.

These are about kids feeling independent.

Whatdaya think? Looking for C&C.

#1 I can do it myself


#2 We Are Big Girls Now
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#3 All By Myself


Chris

sunflowerstudio

Hi there:

my impression is that the kids are too close to other people to illustrate the theme you say you're going for -- "independence", by themselves.

AndMan

Chris,
#2 & #3 work for me.
I don't think there are any obvious guardians in proximity to the kids in those unlike #1.
You might look at cropping #2 more square (just to the left of the hand on the rhs) to lose the person on the far right - they aren't adding anything and it makes the girls more of the focus.

On #3 you might want to see if playing with the contrast would give it more pop.

JAG

AndMan wrote:

Chris,
#2 & #3 work for me.
I don't think there are any obvious guardians in proximity to the kids in those unlike #1.
You might look at cropping #2 more square (just to the left of the hand on the rhs) to lose the person on the far right - they aren't adding anything and it makes the girls more of the focus.

On #3 you might want to see if playing with the contrast would give it more pop.

tinamarie52

AndMan wrote:

Chris,
#2 & #3 work for me.
I don't think there are any obvious guardians in proximity to the kids in those unlike #1.
You might look at cropping #2 more square (just to the left of the hand on the rhs) to lose the person on the far right - they aren't adding anything and it makes the girls more of the focus.

On #3 you might want to see if playing with the contrast would give it more pop.

Thanks everyone for the comments. Very helpful.

AndMan, I worked your crop suggestion on #2 and brightened up #3. Do you think that improves either of them?

I do plan to shoot some this weekend. Comments on what I have here will help me develop my eye for this type of shot.

Here are the re-worked images:

#2 We are big girls now

cropped




#3 All by myself

brightened and more contrast

travelways

Hi Chris,

I just got an idea

For the cropped image of the 2 little girls, I think you can change the title to:

"Not too small for a big world"