Hit or Miss?

seastack

I was revisiting an essay of a car wash I shot 18 months ago and did an edit from the ground up again. I ran across this and ... hit or miss? ... I'm afraid I am more in love with what I was trying to do than what I accomplished but would appreciate thoughts ... it's that damn dead space that's killing me.

p.s. the title of this post should read "Hit or Miss?" ... not sure how I did that!, wish I could change it.

michswiss

Mentioning that it was a part of an essay is swaying me to feel that this is more of a transitional image connecting two parts of a story. The dead space doesn't bother me so much. Beautifully executed technically with the reflections and composition but not sure if it stands on it's own.

Qarik

it's interesting but not really compelling

AlfieGoodrich

I often find that shots like this really work well when paired with something else. I often make diptychs or triptychs to tell stories in my work and this sort of shot can work very well as a connector between other shots which either tell the part of the story to the left or the right or just another part of the story entirely, but one which fills in the gaps.

Basically this is what michswiss says... it's a great potential connector piece, this photo. I like it a lot. The tones are great and the little segments of people are compelling. There's a faint whiff of Friedlander going on here. Nicely shot. It's a keeper, but it needs other images around it... preferably ones that can be viewed in the same 'eyeful', which is where diptychs and triptychs are very cool.

Nice shot sir. :-)

Nikonic1

You can change the title of your thread by editing you OP in the "advanced" mode

Richard

Nikonic1 wrote:

You can change the title of your thread by editing you OP in the "advanced" mode

Not really. Users can change post titles but not thread titles. I edited the title.

seastack

Thanks Richard! )

I appreciate the feedback, appears this is an almost. Such potential, bummer. )

bdcolen

seastack wrote:

I was revisiting an essay of a car wash I shot 18 months ago and did an edit from the ground up again. I ran across this and ... hit or miss? ... I'm afraid I am more in love with what I was trying to do than what I accomplished but would appreciate thoughts ... it's that damn dead space that's killing me.

p.s. the title of this post should read "Hit or Miss?" ... not sure how I did that!, wish I could change it.

I am really, really torn - part of me wants to say you hit it clean out of the park; this is a really compelling, challenging, ambiguous image. I love it.

But part of me is saying, if only...But I'm not sure what the if only is. Actually, if I did not know this was from a series on a car wash I don't think I'd feel the hesitancy - I'd just say 'I love it.' Knowing the car wash part, I want some element that says 'car wash' to me. So take back what you said, and I'll say it's a real winner.