#45 "Together Apart"

lizzard_nyc

Morning all,
I was in Miami when I read about this challenge and managed to get this shot with the challenge in mind. So, no reshoots, unless you can fly me back down:rofl .

Does it work?

I also think I will use "Together Apart" for the title.

C&C appreciated.

bfjr

I see it, but not the Title.

silversx80

Great shot, Liz. I think it plays into the theme very well.

There are a few things distracting to me, but not in a big way. Maybe a tighter crop off the top, but it's entirely subjective.

The only other little nit I can come up with is the noise. I don't think it takes anything away, however.

Once again, I really like how this photo plays with the theme.

VisualXpressions

Why is it so noisy? the square thing in the bg is definitely a distraction... did you try cropping to the tops of their heads and both sides up to the chairs? or is it already cropped tight? you might be able to clone out the distraction... The shot is great! I just think the execution needs work...

Winston

tinamarie52

Liz, I like it. I agree that you could try cropping to just above their heads. If you even it up by cropping a bit off the bottom, then you will have a nice horizontal shot which might exxaggerate the apartness.

I enjoy your eye for things. It is totally different than mine that it always gives me a new perspective.

chris

lizzard_nyc

bfjr wrote:

I see it, but not the Title.

hmmmm--Really the title doesn't work?
I will see what else I can come up with.

How about "Misery Loves Company"--too harsh?

lizzard_nyc

silversx80 wrote:

Great shot, Liz. I think it plays into the theme very well.

There are a few things distracting to me, but not in a big way. Maybe a tighter crop off the top, but it's entirely subjective.

The only other little nit I can come up with is the noise. I don't think it takes anything away, however.

Once again, I really like how this photo plays with the theme.

Hey Joe,
Good to see you here again.

Finally started shooting RAW and processing on the Masters program for the black and white grainy--but I agree, even with the extra help, it's a little too noisy--but you know how in love I am with that filter.

I have reworked it---will post shortly.

Thanks for commenting--glad it the shot fits the bill.

lizzard_nyc

VisualXpressions wrote:

Why is it so noisy? the square thing in the bg is definitely a distraction... did you try cropping to the tops of their heads and both sides up to the chairs? or is it already cropped tight? you might be able to clone out the distraction... The shot is great! I just think the execution needs work...

Winston

Hi Winston,
I use a filter for my Olympus E620--it's a high contrast b&w grainy filter that can be applied in camera or to RAW photos--I normally really like how they look but find this one too noisy myself.

I have reworked the shot--hang on for repost.

Thanks for taking the time to comment.

lizzard_nyc

tinamarie52 wrote:

Liz, I like it. I agree that you could try cropping to just above their heads. If you even it up by cropping a bit off the bottom, then you will have a nice horizontal shot which might exxaggerate the apartness.

I enjoy your eye for things. It is totally different than mine that it always gives me a new perspective.

chris

Aww thanks for saying that Chris. I feel the same, that's why I practically live on dgrin--always learning from others.

lizzard_nyc

OK--Image reworked!
Got rid of the high contrast b&w grainy--and went with this.

New working title "Misery Loves Company".



Look at that--I learned to clone .

tinamarie52

That's why I love the Challenges... I always learn something new.

I must say that you could give them a tad more head space. The man on the right looks like he's ducking so that he could fit into your photo. I do like the new crop, tho.

chris

bfjr

lizzard_nyc wrote:

hmmmm--Really the title doesn't work?
I will see what else I can come up with.

How about "Misery Loves Company"--too harsh?

Seems Comfy to me

VisualXpressions

The rework looks great I love the Symmetry and balance of the image... good job removing the square thing in the bg... This will definitely be a contender

DsrtVW

I like the rework also. They always put those electrical transformers(big square thing) in the worst places. The tighter crop works better IMHO.
How about "a moment of distance" for the title.

lizzard_nyc

tinamarie52 wrote:

That's why I love the Challenges... I always learn something new.

I must say that you could give them a tad more head space. The man on the right looks like he's ducking so that he could fit into your photo. I do like the new crop, tho.

chris

Thanks Chris,
I reworked it again to give it more head room, but I lose something when I do that, plus the bigger space that needs to be cloned out doesn't look very good.

So I think I'll go with this tighter crop. Thank you for commenting.

lizzard_nyc

DsrtVW wrote:

I like the rework also. They always put those electrical transformers(big square thing) in the worst places. The tighter crop works better IMHO.
How about "a moment of distance" for the title.

I like your title. I was kind of struggling with that...So thank you.

The transformer boxes were all over the place in South Beach--very annoying!

lizzard_nyc

VisualXpressions wrote:

The rework looks great I love the Symmetry and balance of the image... good job removing the square thing in the bg... This will definitely be a contender

Excellent! Glad you like the rework.

lizzard_nyc

lizzard_nyc wrote:

Excellent! Glad you like the rework.

Ok after sleeping on this shot for two days, I'm thinking Chris has a point--is the crop a smidge too tight over the fellas head.

I reworked it--cropped it but not as tight--BUT, now I can't get the black and white conversion as sweet as the shot I entered.

So please--compare the two shots--which one is best?

The one I entered?

1.



or the new reworked version--more head room, different black and white conversion

2.

bf2015

I really like the new crop with more headspace.

The entire scene to me IMHO says "Taking A Moment Apart"....or something along those lines. Know what I mean?

lizzard_nyc

bf2015 wrote:

I really like the new crop with more headspace.

The entire scene to me IMHO says "Taking A Moment Apart"....or something along those lines. Know what I mean?

Thanks for the reply --thought maybe it would be by the wayside with so many different versions. Ok that is the one I am entering--the one with slightly more head room.
BTW, DsrtVW suggested "A Moment of Distance" which is pretty close to yours. Glad that's the message that gets across.

travelways

I like the reworked version #2

AndMan

photo-bug wrote:

I like the reworked version #2