Freedom

masterofone

TonyCooper

I really don't get this. While there are two people in the scene, they don't contribute to the image at all. The man at the right detracts somewhat.

The sleeping person has no apparent connection with the memorial and is not prominent enough in the image to be a subject of interest.

Sorry, but I just don't see this as a shot that captivates at all.

masterofone

Thanks for looking Tony. I have had little success in the street & PJ section. I was going for the ambiguity thing. Having been there, I know that the three people in the photo were "free", homeless, and all chose to live that day near a memorial that read "freedom is not free".
Having conveyed none of that in this photo is probably why I have had few kudos in this area.

TonyCooper

masterofone wrote:

Thanks for looking Tony. I have had little success in the street & PJ section. I was going for the ambiguity thing. Having been there, I know that the three people in the photo were "free", homeless, and all chose to live that day near a memorial that read "freedom is not free".
Having conveyed none of that in this photo is probably why I have had few kudos in this area.

Don't feel like the Lone Ranger.

Three people? I see that now. I should have the counted feet of the sleeping person.

PMC

Hi masterof one. I think the thing here is that you've had to explain in words what your photo itself was supposed to express. You may know that the people in the photo were homeless, but how is the viewer supposed to also know that? Are there any visual clues to prompt me to connect the people to the words on the monument?

Keep trying, the kudos will come:D

Patti

I'd try a tighter crop of this, get rid of some of the right and top. That might make the sleeping man more prominent in the scene. I'd also up your blacks a fair bit to add some drama.

masterofone

I'd try a tighter crop of this, get rid of some of the right and top.

I had it cropped much tighter but thought the inclusion of the flags might add something. I'll take another look.

zoomer

I totally get it.
The sleeping bums with the sign is perfect.
The guy walking around, maybe could have waited till he got out of the scene.
Yes the flags should either fully show or crop just bit more off the top to take them out completely.

You can't up your blacks or you will lose your two bums.....I believe.

AndMan

I have to say that when I first saw this I did actually get it, if only because having seen "Freedom is not free" I expected to see a counterpoint somewhere in the image and then saw the sleepers.

I think you do need to increase the contrast as the image is washed out. I think you only need a little and that you can do it without losing the sleepers.

masterofone

I have upped the blacks and dodged the sleepers as much as I think I can.