What could I have done better?

SimpsonBrothers

First one I've processed, have about 40 more, but this one seems off to me...
C&C Please

Jazmyn76

I'm in no way a pro, but here's my take..
Is it desaturated at all? The color doesnt seem to *pop* much..? Her hands are both cut off too, so that is a bit distracting, could you try a closer crop, say chest up and see if that brings the attention more to her expression than the different pattern of her shirt mixed with the rocky background?

Swartzy

The look isn't real flattering (meaning facial expression and pose)...looking a bit stiff but could be used to your advantage. The processing is a bit too edgy making her skin hardened. It all depends where you want this shot go in post. If going for the contrasted look, take it further, or go the other way and brighten it up (the subject only) and beautify....add some color. There also appears to be red in the pupils.

SimpsonBrothers

Made some adjustments, any better?

Scott_Quier

Here's what I see that might be throwing you off:

• I'm not too thrilled with her expression. Probably because it induces the wrinkled forehead.
• You cut off her finger tips and the right edge cuts through her wrist
• Her face seems a bit dark to me, but that might be this monitor
• Background is very, very busy. Would (maybe) have been better if you could have provided a bit of seperation between her and that background - some distance and a much larger aperture.
• Her pose is a bit different - very stiff
• Color seems off - maybe a de-sat? Not sure it's working here.

Final note - I wrote the above before I read the entire thread. If the image in Post #1 is a re-work, hmmmmm I think you may want re-think your workflow and/or processing technique a bit.

rgphoto

Scott_Quier wrote:

Here's what I see that might be throwing you off:

• I'm not too thrilled with her expression. Probably because it induces the wrinkled forehead.
• You cut off her finger tips and the right edge cuts through her wrist
• Her face seems a bit dark to me, but that might be this monitor
• Background is very, very busy. Would (maybe) have been better if you could have provided a bit of seperation between her and that background - some distance and a much larger aperture.
• Her pose is a bit different - very stiff
• Color seems off - maybe a de-sat? Not sure it's working here.

Final note - I wrote the above before I read the entire thread. If the image in Post #1 is a re-work, hmmmmm I think you may want re-think your workflow and/or processing technique a bit.

Agreed - that was my first thought.