My meager contibution to Photojurnilism... 4 images

Mr. Quiet

I took all of this with my faithful 90. Any and all critique is asked for and very welcome. I am here to get better, not to be pampered:D

1)

Or this one?

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4)

WhatSheSaw

For me, 1. #2 looks a little washed out.

And #4 gives me a crick in my neck. I like the hair and the pink coat. Is pink a girl color in Asia?

#3 doesn't do much for me.

Mr. Quiet

Yes, Asian girls like ti wear pink. It goes perfect with their body skin tone.

Richard

I prefer #1 to #2 because they are all mostly looking in the same direction, so it makes the viewer wonder what's there. In #2, you don't get that feeling of coherence.

Mr. Quiet

Thanks Richard.

WhatSheSaw and Richard: Why does the third one not work for you guys, what is missing?

michswiss

Aaron,

It's impossible to answer what's missing. Whatever it is, it isn't there. The image is of a woman going through her exercises, shot from an oblique angle which separates the viewer from the scene. Why should we relate or react to her? Would a person in the US or Europe react to someone on their morning jog?

It's an incredibly hard shot to get and I've been trying for two years. I don't think I'm there yet with a possible exception of an accident that happened two weekends ago when I was attempting once more to get a group of ladies going through their morning dance / exercise. I'll post it in a separate thread. It's not ground breaking, but damn it's a hard shot to get.

Mr. Quiet

I totally 100% agree with you....

richardman

Mr. Quiet wrote:

Thanks Richard.

WhatSheSaw and Richard: Why does the third one not work for you guys, what is missing?

Another richard. Keep in mind that I practice Tai Chi too, so I can give you critique on that as well :-)

Anyway, so you have one person in a mid-movement. Fine. What else is there? Are you just capturing her movement? If so, why? The form takes at least 5 mins to as much as 45 mins to do, so why this particular move? Does it say "graceful" to you, or is the fact that the feet up is interesting.

How does the stuff on the rock interact?

Mr. Quiet

richardman wrote:

Another richard. Keep in mind that I practice Tai Chi too, so I can give you critique on that as well :-)

Anyway, so you have one person in a mid-movement. Fine. What else is there? Are you just capturing her movement? If so, why? The form takes at least 5 mins to as much as 45 mins to do, so why this particular move? Does it say "graceful" to you, or is the fact that the feet up is interesting.

How does the stuff on the rock interact?

It is a peak in her form. I don't think the clothes add anything, but I could not get rid of them either. Yes, I was capturing her movement...

I think this shot was a failure. It goes in the trash bin.

richardman

Mr. Quiet wrote:

It is a peak in her form. I don't think the clothes add anything, but I could not get rid of them either. Yes, I was capturing her movement...

I think this shot was a failure. It goes in the trash bin.

Well, don't be so harsh, that's our job :-) Seriously, it's not a failure, just need more.

May be try multiple shots. Make it flow :-)