Ch 48 - Photo 1

dkoyanagi

Here's my first attempt at ch 48. As always, comments and critiques welcome.

Lifeline
2005-09-28



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SnapHappy

Dan, I like this picture. The dangling/stretched cord leads the eye down nicely to the person and it leaves me wondering whether there is distressing news on the other end of the line.
Have you tried sitting forward a little and playing with the shadows of that cord against the wall?

(Had to mention that your last entry in the portraits was very good too.
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Sandy

I like the drama of the photo. Nice work.

DoctorIt

I like it too

just some minor thoughts I had...
-little more contrast, slight hot spots might be ok here
-turn the head a bit to see the phone more?
both minor, just random things the came to mind.

very different from a "phone shot", which is what works so well for it

erich6

I like what you are doing here. This is a picture that tells a story. And the use of black and white, lighting and shadows, etc. work well together to enhance the story.

That said, I think there is room for improvement. The negative space works here but I think it's a bit much. I would shift the composition down so there is less of the top part of the wall (maybe just 1/5 of the frame). That would get rid of the bright source reflection on the upper right (which I find distracting) and bring out a bit more of the subject. I also think the person at the bottom is cut off too much so the shift in composition will help there also.

Erich

dkoyanagi

Thanks for your feedback everybody! It's very much appreciated. I've been working on different poses, lighting, and camera angles, but so far nothing's clicked. Hopefully I'll have something before the deadline. Stay tuned...

davev

This is really good Dan.
If you could use PS, I'd clean up the lower right corner.
But it looks great the way it is.