#81 Do you think this works with theme?

CHANDLERJACHANDLERJA Registered Users Posts: 400 Major grins
edited July 21, 2011 in The Dgrin Challenges
And if you do any suggestions on what else I could do for it?
Thanks for any help!!


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  • richterslrichtersl Registered Users Posts: 3,322 Major grins
    edited July 18, 2011
    I like it! I'd try cropping the water from the bottom but then experiment with cutting from the right and the left so that the point of the stone wall in the foreground doesn't fall dead center in the photograph. I think if you did this it would more strongly emphasize all the wonderful geometric shapes you captured.
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  • CHANDLERJACHANDLERJA Registered Users Posts: 400 Major grins
    edited July 18, 2011
    Thanks Linda!

    Is this what your were talking about?

    bwbuilding2-XL.jpg

    Also what do you think of this shot? He was pretty much not connected to anything.

    MAN1b2-XL.jpg
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  • SeascapeSSeascapeS Registered Users Posts: 814 Major grins
    edited July 18, 2011
    Wow - I love them both!
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  • WhatSheSawWhatSheSaw Registered Users Posts: 2,221 Major grins
    edited July 18, 2011
    Very, very nice on both!

    I think i would keep some of the water on the first - maybe just below the intersection with the wall on the left - and the windows on the right.

    #2 is a wow on the theme.
  • FrochFroch Registered Users Posts: 571 Major grins
    edited July 19, 2011
    I love building lines, but the lone gentleman is amazing! beautiful capture of his far off stare, and a body position that says uncomfortable/un-easy.
    for me personally, this needs two things. to be drawn to that face. Right now it takes me a split second to scan the image and land on his face. It's a beautiful moment of discovery, but I think his face and the pigeons are competing with the brightness of the building window, sidewalk and the upper left corner. The other thing I personally think it needs is an amazing title. Good luck!
  • richterslrichtersl Registered Users Posts: 3,322 Major grins
    edited July 19, 2011
    Love the second version of the buildings with the crop! thumb.gif

    But the man with the pigeons is much stronger on theme. There's such a story to that shot and these types of images have done well in past challenges. deal.gif

    Just for the heck of it, can you post a B&W version of the latter? I'm curious to see that side by side with the color one.
    Linda

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  • ic4uic4u Registered Users Posts: 1,455 Major grins
    edited July 19, 2011
    Love them both! Of the buildings shots, I actually prefer the first before the crop, I just think it feels more grounded, and B&W is perfect for it....in agreement with the others, your lonely man shot is awesome for the challenge! Nice job to come up with two great shots!
    Karin


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  • CHANDLERJACHANDLERJA Registered Users Posts: 400 Major grins
    edited July 19, 2011
    Thank you everyone for the comments! I will do some work on the man shot including a BW conversion and post in a bit. Thank you so much for all the help!!
    Jeromy
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  • CHANDLERJACHANDLERJA Registered Users Posts: 400 Major grins
    edited July 19, 2011
    What do yall think of this one? I like the BW and closer crop myself.
    Thanks!


    Disconnected

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  • travelwaystravelways Registered Users Posts: 7,854 Major grins
    edited July 19, 2011
    I like #1 and #3, but #3 is much more interesting to me.
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  • richterslrichtersl Registered Users Posts: 3,322 Major grins
    edited July 19, 2011
    I really like the B&W version of the man. But I'm not convinced this is the optimal crop for it. I think you need to leave a little more of the folks in the background in the photo. Doing this would show more of the "world" from which he's disconnected himself. You can still put more emphasis on the man by adding a (very) subtle vignette to the image.
    Linda

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  • CHANDLERJACHANDLERJA Registered Users Posts: 400 Major grins
    edited July 19, 2011
    Ill give it a shot Linda :) Thanks!
    Jeromy
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  • ic4uic4u Registered Users Posts: 1,455 Major grins
    edited July 19, 2011
    richtersl wrote: »
    I really like the B&W version of the man. But I'm not convinced this is the optimal crop for it. I think you need to leave a little more of the folks in the background in the photo. Doing this would show more of the "world" from which he's disconnected himself. You can still put more emphasis on the man by adding a (very) subtle vignette to the image.

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    Karin


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  • CHANDLERJACHANDLERJA Registered Users Posts: 400 Major grins
    edited July 19, 2011
    How about this?
    Thanks for the help!

    BWMANCROPB2s-XL.jpg
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  • ic4uic4u Registered Users Posts: 1,455 Major grins
    edited July 19, 2011
    thumb.gif Looks good to me!
    Karin


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  • SeascapeSSeascapeS Registered Users Posts: 814 Major grins
    edited July 19, 2011
    Last one - perfect!
    SandiZ
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  • GretaPicsGretaPics Registered Users Posts: 373 Major grins
    edited July 19, 2011
    Really like your final version/entry! GP
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  • WhatSheSawWhatSheSaw Registered Users Posts: 2,221 Major grins
    edited July 20, 2011
    I like the context with the young men walking away in the BG. And the movement of the birds against his stillness. The last crop really works for me.
  • richterslrichtersl Registered Users Posts: 3,322 Major grins
    edited July 20, 2011
    WhatSheSaw wrote: »
    I like the context with the young men walking away in the BG. And the movement of the birds against his stillness. The last crop really works for me.
    15524779-Ti.gif Me too! Excellent work!!!!
    Linda

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  • dlscott56dlscott56 Registered Users Posts: 1,324 Major grins
    edited July 20, 2011
    WhatSheSaw wrote: »
    I like the context with the young men walking away in the BG. And the movement of the birds against his stillness. The last crop really works for me.

    +1

    Also like your second version of the buildings.
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  • CHANDLERJACHANDLERJA Registered Users Posts: 400 Major grins
    edited July 21, 2011
    Thank you for all the help and kind comments. I think the hardest time I had was coming up with a title. I just kept looking into those eyes trying to imagine what he was really thinking or where he was at in his mind. I just couldn't put myself in his mind. Disconnected was the word that kept coming back to me. Not very original but it just fit for me.

    Thanks again everyone!!
    Jeromy
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