Nice series. The first two don't really work for me, but I like the middle of the series most. My non-professional take flavored by personal preferences...
1. Looks distorted, like from a WA lens?
2. The distortions bother me here too. She looks fine here, but she is leaning a bit to the right and the house to the left. I sort of wish there was either a bunch more or a bunch less hair over her eye.
3. Nice. Framing idea is good. If you had a longer lens, you could have pulled back and had her in the frame. But then that might not have been your goal...
4. Like this one, except that the flare/haze feels artificial. There is hard line of haze. Is that natural or PS'ed in? The harsh transition pulls my eye away.
5. I really like this one. Slightly tilted (for me I'd rather see big tilt or no tilt). The other issue I have here is how the sun/sky processed out. The sky and sun seem to have clamping issues and lost their smooth transitions.
6. . Really love it. Minor nit... Can you clone out the car?
7. Lots to like here as well. Minor nit... Can you lighten up under her eyes?
8. The hair (and the shadows cast by it) on the face isn't helping here. Light looks really nice.
9. The super WA isn't working for me. Also you ended up with almost all of her (minus a couple of toes).
Wow I like Sheryl and have never met her. She has a serious aura about her.
I am not going to critique the technicals on these....because I just like them....
Nice work...great model.
My favorite is 8.....yeah there are some technical issues with it...don't care .
Very good exercise with speedlights (flash). Both the night by day effects and others are pleasing to look at. There is however one Photo that sticks out #4 mainly due to the pose. The others I do really like, beautiful smile and eyes.
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Nice series. The first two don't really work for me, but I like the middle of the series most. My non-professional take flavored by personal preferences...
1. Looks distorted, like from a WA lens?
2. The distortions bother me here too. She looks fine here, but she is leaning a bit to the right and the house to the left. I sort of wish there was either a bunch more or a bunch less hair over her eye.
3. Nice. Framing idea is good. If you had a longer lens, you could have pulled back and had her in the frame. But then that might not have been your goal...
4. Like this one, except that the flare/haze feels artificial. There is hard line of haze. Is that natural or PS'ed in? The harsh transition pulls my eye away.
5. I really like this one. Slightly tilted (for me I'd rather see big tilt or no tilt). The other issue I have here is how the sun/sky processed out. The sky and sun seem to have clamping issues and lost their smooth transitions.
6. . Really love it. Minor nit... Can you clone out the car?
7. Lots to like here as well. Minor nit... Can you lighten up under her eyes?
8. The hair (and the shadows cast by it) on the face isn't helping here. Light looks really nice.
9. The super WA isn't working for me. Also you ended up with almost all of her (minus a couple of toes).
Thanks for the detailed critique. On 1, a 50mm was used. On 4, the flare is natural as i wasn't using a hood on the 50 mm. In regards to the use of WA lens, the people who see my work request those shots and Sheryl likes the distortions and all the problems inherent with shooting WA and portraits.
I actually like the the other nitpicks you point out. Like in 5, the sky was mostly blown out and the background was in shadows. I wanted to give a hyper reality for her surroundings so I went over the top on the backgrouds while leaving her untouched.
I love #4!
on #5, she has an aura/halo around her entire body.. I don't know if that's from PP or the natural sun on her backside. It's boggling my mind.
woops, just saw your last post about #5!
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I love #4!
on #5, she has an aura/halo around her entire body.. I don't know if that's from PP or the natural sun on her backside. It's boggling my mind.
woops, just saw your last post about #5!
Thanks, the halo is there naturally, I just played around with the backgrounds more. Here is the original.
Thanks, the halo is there naturally, I just played around with the backgrounds more. Here is the original.
Look just above her head in the edit. There is some noticeable space where the original sky is still dominant. That said, you indicated you were going for a more surreal look in this one, so it can play into your goal here.
I do love your recovery of the b/g in the image here. Seeing the before/after is instructive.
Look just above her head in the edit. There is some noticeable space where the original sky is still dominant. That said, you indicated you were going for a more surreal look in this one, so it can play into your goal here.
I do love your recovery of the b/g in the image here. Seeing the before/after is instructive.
Ok, notice it now. The buildings were masked off and I used topaz adjust/psychedelic preset with NR. I masked off the the sky in a separate edit to recover some of blown highlights.
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1. Looks distorted, like from a WA lens?
2. The distortions bother me here too. She looks fine here, but she is leaning a bit to the right and the house to the left. I sort of wish there was either a bunch more or a bunch less hair over her eye.
3. Nice. Framing idea is good. If you had a longer lens, you could have pulled back and had her in the frame. But then that might not have been your goal...
4. Like this one, except that the flare/haze feels artificial. There is hard line of haze. Is that natural or PS'ed in? The harsh transition pulls my eye away.
5. I really like this one. Slightly tilted (for me I'd rather see big tilt or no tilt). The other issue I have here is how the sun/sky processed out. The sky and sun seem to have clamping issues and lost their smooth transitions.
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7. Lots to like here as well. Minor nit... Can you lighten up under her eyes?
8. The hair (and the shadows cast by it) on the face isn't helping here. Light looks really nice.
9. The super WA isn't working for me. Also you ended up with almost all of her (minus a couple of toes).
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I am not going to critique the technicals on these....because I just like them....
Nice work...great model.
My favorite is 8.....yeah there are some technical issues with it...don't care
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Thanks for the detailed critique. On 1, a 50mm was used. On 4, the flare is natural as i wasn't using a hood on the 50 mm. In regards to the use of WA lens, the people who see my work request those shots and Sheryl likes the distortions and all the problems inherent with shooting WA and portraits.
I actually like the the other nitpicks you point out. Like in 5, the sky was mostly blown out and the background was in shadows. I wanted to give a hyper reality for her surroundings so I went over the top on the backgrouds while leaving her untouched.
on #5, she has an aura/halo around her entire body.. I don't know if that's from PP or the natural sun on her backside. It's boggling my mind.
woops, just saw your last post about #5!
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Thanks, the halo is there naturally, I just played around with the backgrounds more. Here is the original.
Look just above her head in the edit. There is some noticeable space where the original sky is still dominant. That said, you indicated you were going for a more surreal look in this one, so it can play into your goal here.
I do love your recovery of the b/g in the image here. Seeing the before/after is instructive.
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Ok, notice it now. The buildings were masked off and I used topaz adjust/psychedelic preset with NR. I masked off the the sky in a separate edit to recover some of blown highlights.
# 1 doesn't work for me.
#2 is my dead favorite of the set.
I also like 3, 5 and 9 although in # 3 you might have softened the flash just a bit.
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