Does this image tell a story

ran

I captured this candid shot over the thanksgiving visits, of my wife and grandson . Do you think it tells a story?

Thanks Randall

r3t1awr3yd

Personally, after looking the pic over (and expecting to see a great story!), I find I'm really distracted by a lot of elements not related to a single story (especially one that exudes your title).

I think with your title, you really meant to capture the interaction between the grandma(?) and the grandson(?) but there are way too many other elements (apples, computer monitor, wine rack, out doors, plant, books, dining table, chairs, super heavy vignetting, etc) that take away from that interaction.

Next time (or even with a heavy crop on this pic), I'd move in closer to the "action".

D3Sshooter

I have been looking it over and over but can not find the story. So , I am afraid that it is not working. I was wondering if the hint was " wisdom" as it written down. But it does not show.. sorry

RyanS

Is the fruit in the foreground part of the story? Maybe the computer screen? Something in the backyard?

ran

WEll I appreciate your comments.
I had thought the " library look with all the surroundings" would depict that the grandma was conversing with her grandson and imparting some "wisdom" among all the other learning experiences one has in his early years including the computer screen . The bowl of fruit I thought about just removing and decided against it,I left it in to help lead the eye into the image.
Guess I was over playing the scene in my mind.
Thanks Randall

Hackbone

The bowl of fruit is definitely not a leading line!! Rember bright areas come forward to ones eye and dark areas receede. Your subject should have your eyes interest. You xo not have to stay with a traditional crop. Try a long narrow crop.

Surfdog

The distractions aside, there is just something missing. Part of it may be the distance from the subjects, part of it may be that your wife's face is obscured, part of it is the space between your wife and grandson. There is a personal connection missing between the two of them which would have made the shot more warm & intimate. Even if your grandson had been leaning forward toward your wife, the connection would have been there. (IMHO)

BrettDeutsch

I'm with the rest of the group...the story: "woman and child hang out on a window seat in a suburban house", doesn't speak to me. Sorry.

jww

Sorry... I agree with the others... just too many distractions. Plus there is a bit of lamp up above that is unsightly and does nothing for you. Maybe if had been the other side of the table? ...or had pulled the table out of the way and try again? I dunno.

As it is, you have only 10 - 15% of the shot attempting to "say something" and ends up saying nothing.

ran

Thanks guys I never expected to receive such great details in your comments -I have learned a lot here . I initially thought this was a great photo telling a story ,now I see it has a lot to be desired ,there's just so much to getting it right . Thanks a million
Randall

jww

No worries. I think sometimes when you are more emotionally attached to the subjects, you tend to see more with your heart than your eyes.

ran

Very well said jww

jeffreaux2

jww wrote: »

No worries. I think sometimes when you are more emotionally attached to the subjects, you tend to see more with your heart than your eyes.

I was thinking this very same thought.

The trick in photography isnt neccisarily for the viewer to somehow be smitten by what grabs the photographer(thats your emotional attachment), but more so an ability for the photgrapher to create an avenue that leads the viewer to find their own emotional attachment.

As mentioned, many of the elements in this image pull they eyes away from the subjects rather than leading to them. Get them closer together and get that camera in near them. But whatever you do, keep shooting!