It's a clever idea, but I think you need to work a little more on the lighting to make it more dramatic. As is, it's kind of flat IMO. I'm about as far from an expert as you can get regarding flash, but I would try to make it appear that the moon is the main source of light, so the shadows on the mountains should reflect that. Just my .02 €.
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I'd print this one out
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