TomBoy? what are your thoughts?

scotthofferphotography

Any comments are appreciated as I am just learning.

New Hope Studios

I think this is cute. What sort of feedback are you looking for when you titled it "Tomboy?" If these were my photos, I would tighten the crop a bit more (lose some of the blank white at the top), because I find myself wanting to look there instead of at her initially. Otherwise, I wouldn't change anything. Nice job!

scotthofferphotography

Thanks.. here is another from the photoshoot. I was just looking for comments on what you would have done differently?

New Hope Studios

Love this. Yep, tighten the crop on all of them and straighten #3 up a bit more... that rotation is a bit too extreme for my eyes to take it in comfortably. I would love to see a repost if you make any changes.

Mike J

Pretty girl and great colors. Not sure how detailed you want so forgive me if this is more than you want...

#1 I see some odd things in the background. In places it is white and others a little darker. Remnants from editing? The biggest problem I have is that I think her eyes are turned too far. There is just too much white showing especially in her right eye. Few stray hairs down her face that I would try to clean up as well.

#2 Nice smile. Like the hat. She looks very relaxed. Same comment on the stray hairs in her face. I also with there was more light in her eyes to brighter them and give some bigger catchlights. I see two very small ones. How did you light this one?

Quincy T

Mike J wrote: »

Pretty girl and great colors. Not sure how detailed you want so forgive me if this is more than you want...

#1 I see some odd things in the background. In places it is white and others a little darker. Remnants from editing? The biggest problem I have is that I think her eyes are turned too far. There is just too much white showing especially in her right eye. Few stray hairs down her face that I would try to clean up as well.

I'll concur here. This is a common criticism of photographers doing shots where the subject is "looking into the distance". You don't want it too dramatic, because otherwise it just looks creepy. Keep in mind you're capturing the image forever, so if that picture was to hang on a wall, that girl is going to be looking extreme left for the rest of the image's existence. Now does that sound natural? Not really.

I think the facial area of your shots is lacking any interesting light. Rather, you have a very high key background, and this unusually unlit subject which seems to be properly exposed but with no assisting lights to bring your attention to the face.

Icebear

Either gravity works weirdly where you live or you need to lose the severe tilt. Hair just does not hang that way.
Edit: Oh, wait. Morgantown. Never mind. Gravity does work a bit dif'rent out there.

reyvee61

I echo much of what has already been said here...my first impression are the remnants of post editing....the dodging of her eyes and teeth are obvious especially on the first two. The stray hairs over her eye on the first one really make it obvious to say the least...

Hackbone

You have some nice work here. I believe your having some bleed over on your main exposure from you background lighting. Your colors are lackingsome pop from it. You might do well using some scrims to block the light some. How far from the bkg is your subject? Good old Morgantown, I'll be in Uniontown this weekend.

scotthofferphotography

Thanks for all the comments. The gravity is off up here.

Here is the setup. All homemade stuff except my camera and flash.





The flash is no longer on the umbrella, its hanging from the ceiling like in the diagram, and a fluorescent bulb setup has replaced the flash location in the picture above.

Hackbone

If possible try to get your subject 6 feet or a little more from the background.

scotthofferphotography

I got about 10 feet total shooting room. My back is against the wall at the diagram shown above, and my lens make them look distorted at 18mm. Any other suggestions?

Icebear

scotthofferphotography wrote: »

I got about 10 feet total shooting room. My back is against the wall at the diagram shown above, and my lens make them look distorted at 18mm. Any other suggestions?

Sledge hammer and wrecking bar??

zoomer

Skin color looks off, more light on the subjects face. Lose the tilts.
Try putting the flash on your subject and the flourescents on the background.
If she is lit properly there will be need to brighten eyes and teeth, in these they are overdone.
It's a journey .

Hackbone

Try to keep your bkg no hotter than2 stops over your subject. This looks like alot more than that.

scotthofferphotography

Im hoping to get some more lights for Christmas. My fluorescents are not bright enough to over expose the background.

Hackbone

I was trying to find a site for you to visit. It was a photographer in Missouri (sp). He does fashion photography and only uses 150 watt household light bulbs with Ace reflectors and he rocks. If I locate it I'll send it to you.

scotthofferphotography

Thanks man. I appreciate it.

Hackbone

Check out Brian Demint's work. Most done with a light bulb.