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Pixel Popper
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I am anxious to hear your thoughts and comments. Thank you.
The divot in the fence on the left is very bright and pulls the eye. I would darken that considerably.
She is right dead center and thus the space to the left is sort of orphaned.
Lew
The divot in the fence on the left is very bright and pulls the eye. I would darken that considerably.
She is right dead center and thus the space to the left is sort of orphaned.
Lew
Cowboydoug
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Without attempting to start an argument, it might be useful if you say why a central point of interest is OK in this image and why you think that bright spot in the fence isn't distracting?
That will give the OP some basis for internalizing these comments and placing them in a context.
Thank you. And thanks for taking the time to share your observations. I tend to agree with the nits to some degree. I originally wanted to place the girl farther to the left and a little lower in the composition, which I agree would have been more interesting than having her high and centered. The problem there is the surface quality of the wood in the fence, as there are lightly colored squiggles and streaks that would fall on her face, and were considerably more distracting on her face than are the rust colored streaks that are in this alignment. At least, in my opinion.
As to the brightness of the divot, I had tried an earlier version that had it considerably toned down, much like in your example, but it wasn't quite working for me. One of the things I hoped to accomplish on the conceptual level was to give this image more depth, and an almost surreal sense of 3D. The idea was to portray the very thin line between physical reality and our ability to virtually and instantaneously lapse into an almost trance-like state, during which we can fixate our gaze a moment in time that only exists in a small pocket of memory. Yet, it is so REAL that seems it could occupy even a part of our physical sense of vision. I wanted to imagine and visually represent that kind of moment in this composition.
My take on how to possibly accomplish that vision was to make it look layered, with the girl occupying the space just behind the surface of the wall, and those other details appearing to be slightly out front. To do that, I masked away the divot, the No Parking sign, and the rusty nails and their trailings. Then, I went about adjusting the rest of the fence to add more contrast, saturation, push the color balance a bit more blue and magenta, leaving the masked areas untouched. Then, I added a slight brightness adjustment to those masked areas so that those details would specifically stand out against the darker tones of the fence.
And finally, to help along my metaphor of fleeting memory occupying current reality, I thought I would try to give the back layer, the girl, the look of having been projected from an old projector with a dim lamp, that is slightly off kilter in its aim, thus the heavy vignetting to her left side, and to a much lesser extent, farther to the right. In that context, I don't feel like the left side is orphaned because the dark negative space frames and gives shape to the projection "effect".
So that's what I was thinking about while making this image. Whether or not it was successful, I'll leave that for observers to decide. But I appreciate your comments. I strongly considered both of them in the making, but ultimately went in a different direction.
Lew
I wouldn't clean it up either. I like a few distractions in a shot like this...it all evens out... once you start where do you stop?
I like it how it is.
Did you look at it in black and white with strong contrast...does it make her stand out more??
...if you do another one of these....just a thought...maybe paste her in focus photo onto a photo of the wall which is somewhat out of focus....just an idea.
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Little Lew... I dig ya man... no worries here... I'm a lot like you generally... and personally... I like input on my images & I generally offer more than my fair share about others...(wanted or not
<br>There are a lot of people who want to be a pro and to photograph like a pro, even though the public might be better served were they to keep their day jobs...lol But as long as they/we are here we should all work towards helping each other to be all that we can be... So we agree on that I think.
<br> Having said that... I have some real crap posted on here... What do ya think of it? haha
<br> As for this photo... ( I like it)...lol
Cowboydoug
Certified Journeyman Commercial Photographer
www.iWasThereToo.com
Thank you! I haven't tried the black and white approach, but I'll give it a shot. If it's worth seeing, I'll re-post here for the comparison.
I just wanted to see how many times I could use better
Cowboydoug
Certified Journeyman Commercial Photographer
www.iWasThereToo.com