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Hi DGrin... first post here :wink
Wandered around an abandoned property recently with my camera. Would love to get some critique, I am still quite new to this whole thing, both shooting and post-processing, and love to get any input (good or bad... be gentle!). I tried to pick my favorite 5 of the collection:
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Wandered around an abandoned property recently with my camera. Would love to get some critique, I am still quite new to this whole thing, both shooting and post-processing, and love to get any input (good or bad... be gentle!). I tried to pick my favorite 5 of the collection:
#1:
#2:
#3:
#4:
#5:
____Motoception Photography____
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#1: I actually took this not as a keeper but just as a quick snapshot of my surroundings. I think it was a missed opportunity. The composition splits it into vertical quarters, I'm not entirely against it but it maybe would have been better in thirds (removing the left 25% in the composition as it is now) if to allow the green to be bigger in the shot, and get ride of some unnecessary floorspace in the foreground. I forgot I had my flash with me, and if I were to do it again I'd try to flash on the closest wall to help with the details.
I think a better composition would have been to go into the room and take a shot of just the window and the window light against the green wall, and have some of the far back wall showing to add some texture to the same green color. But that composition may not be able to show the clutter on the ground so I dunno.
As it is now I'm not sure how I feel about framing the picture with the door frame. Framing the picture evenly seemed boring, moving it slightly off center seemed better but looks... off. That's why I'm thinking I would be better off going in the room and just getting the window and green walls, trying to get some of the clutter in the bottom.
#2:
This one is okay but I'm not sure I handled the window opening correctly in post processing. The original RAW had it blown out and the Recovery makes it look kind of weird? I took this shot about 10 times focusing on various parts but anything showing the curtain out of focus just looked bad. If I cropped too much of the black out of the right side it also made it awkward. Maybe because the black balances the brightness on the left side.
#3:
One of my two favorites. I see what you mean about the dead space, maybe slight cropping of the right side would make it better? I like how the window sill is framed since the edges include the same amount of the window sill top/bottom and right/left.
#4:
The second of my two favorites, but I think I like this one mostly because of the subject than the actual picture. It was an interesting hat to find just laying there.
#5:
I like how the texture and lines turned out on this one. My lens was wide open at f2.8 but I'd be curious if this would look better with the green more out of focus. Other than that I don't know how I could improve.
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Here's my $.02
This place is creepy-cool, and surely a very interesting place to photograph - good find!
I love the natural light and warm color balance for these subjects - nice work overall
1. I agree that this one is an in-between/almost... perhaps a little further back to include the entire opening (off center) and more of the closest wall for framing, or as you say,
step into the green room and compose there. I don't think flash is needed, as the emphasis should remain on what's beyond the doorway... it's worth a try, but I think the natural light/shadow is King here.
Resist the urge to over-analyze (we all do it), go with your gut... not every click is a keeper.
2. Again, great light and idea, but for me, the out-of-focus portions of the branch, right in the center, are eye-catchers and disrupt the composition.
3. This one is fantastic!
I agree that a little off the right will de-center the flower and improve the composition.
4. Wow... that is an interesting hat! 1984 LA Olympics?? 30yrs. ago?? Go figure!!
Nice detail and light.
5. I can see the appeal here, the fantastic light, the texture and decay, there is nothing "wrong" with the shot, but like Juano, it doesn't entirely work for me... I think it's the geometry and that's just my personal preference.
I love the background as-is! Very moody with a nice balance of detail and blur!
Thanks for sharing!
First... nice early work, you have a good eye
This photography is subjective, so my comments are neither right or wrong, they may be different
I like #1 - the best of the batch. If I were shooting it, I would also have shot it from a lower angle (you might consider different angles in the future)
#2 a tosser, A curtain in focus is not interesting to me
#3 Good potential; I would have changed the angle from lower left to get more negative space in front of the bud with full leaves &
maybe some vertical window to assist in framing the flower
#4&5 - just snap shots (for me)
That would be my style... you will find your own... good luck