* Challenge 22 - Women and Child Together
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"Woman and Child Together"
Comments appreciated.
Comments appreciated.
Thomas
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really nice.. looking at it again.. is it a tinsy bit dark? maybe my monitor..
Lovely photograph, the entry.
ginger
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I should copy down the info from the mag article. Looks good.
But that happy yellow guy, hope he doesn't give your wife a headache, or wake up the baby.
ginger
BTW, does it look too dark to anyone else? I've got to purchase a monitor calibration gizmo sometime...
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However, yours does not look too dark to me. Overall, the sleeve on the child would be too light, if it were overall lighter, IMO.
ginger
Thomas, I am going to be the party pooper here I think. :cry
I hope my comments will be helpful. I DO like the diagonal movement of the viewer's eye from lower left to upper right but I find I am disappointed/troubled by my inability to see a little more of the mother's face - some may find this intriguing or enchanting, but I just cannot see enough of her face to be satisfied somehow.
The technical quality of the image is excellent - the tonalities seem correct - might burn the baby's bright sleeve slightly but overall no defects in tonality. Also not too sharp, just the right quality of blur for a nice soft tone.
The soft lighting works very well - overall I think this is a well exposed photograph that suffers from a less than excellent pose in the mother. I think you have not yet captured the image you really want, but I know you can do it.
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Thomas,
My first glimps brought out the mommie in me. It's precious. I like the pose as is. It's so natural. The position we're all familiar with. This way the mother's face does not overpower the smaller baby's face. I thought the picture seemed a little dark so I played with it. If you try to add brightness, you definitely blow out the sleeve. The darks get grey too, so that's not the answer. I tried desaturating the whole thing a little. That seemed to help make it look softer and also decreased the glow on the sleeve. With the desaturation, I cloned out a few specks on the mom's face and used the blur tool set on 25% strength and blurred out the pores on the mom's forehead and nose. I also took out the line under her eye. She might appreciate that if she was tired and had no makeup on. Just my opinion, and I love to play. Oh, I also used the clone tool around the mom's hand because the gausian blur runs over a little. The area around the tip of her nose could use a little too. I missed that. I think it's a beautiful portrait. I love it.
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Very nice work Snappy - I have to agree that you have significantly improved this image - but I still would llike to see more of mom's face - It's just me I guess
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Thomas,
I don't know if you saw this in the other thread, but it's a great example of flesh tones in a portrait. The way he uses the warm tones in the highlighted area and cool tones in the shadows is great for a baby. Getting that skin soft and smooth is also important. Take a look.
http://www.luminous-landscape.com/essays/snap-art.shtml
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I like the mom's arm in the picture. It completes the curve. Better contrast now. Did you ditch the sepia? I think it's just B&W now right? I think a slight warm cast on the flesh helps, but it can go in later. I can't really see the detail in this small version, but when you get the skin all touched up you can post a larger version. Have you thought of darkening the background. I'm thinking it would balance with the mom's sweater and make the skin tones stand out. Not as dark as the sweater, but just a little darker. Just a thought.
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Thomas,
I hate to be a nit picker, but I still see some problems. The mom's neck has a big blurry spot and there is still some fuzzyness around her wrist and nose. When softening the lines on the neck, I use the clone tool at about 45% strength. This lightens the line but does not cover it completely. That way I preserve the original lines. Then I run the blur tool over them at 20% strength to soften out the pixels. I would use the clone tool around the wrist and face at about 45% strength. Zoom in close and go carefullly around the edges with a brush of about 5 pixels. Follow up with the a larger brush for blending. I still like it with no spots. I also added a slight warm tone.
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