Open Seating

Angelo

something gets me about this photo; not sure what. how about you?
any critiques or suggestions?

David_S85

Angelo wrote:

something gets me about this photo; not sure what. how about you?
any critiques or suggestions?

Sorry, but... no. Either *the* intended subject is missing, or there's too many indeterminate little subjects vying for attention and aren't seen.

saurora

Too much clutter and it interferes with the "cool" factor of the vintage counter, stools and whoaaaaa jukeboxes!!! Needs a story......which your NEXT post does nicely!!!

Angelo

David_S85 wrote:

Sorry, but... no. Either *the* intended subject is missing, or there's too many indeterminate little subjects vying for attention and aren't seen.

fair enough. good points. thanks.

Angelo

saurora wrote:

Too much clutter and it interferes with the "cool" factor of the vintage counter, stools and whoaaaaa jukeboxes!!! Needs a story......which your NEXT post does nicely!!!

gotcha! i'm leaving this one alone. thank you.

John Mueller

Whoa,it gives me heartburn
JK, I agree with the cluter.Perhaps a tighter crop

Awais Yaqub

Tighter Crop and b&w
or
Why not all chairs in row of right side of picture

LiquidOps

Chalk this one up for "People read art in their own way"

I love this shot... to me, I see an empty counter that seems to be once occupied. I see the waiter (Guy behind the counter) kind of looking off towards the door, probably thinking to himself "Where is everyong Going? Was it something I said?"

I say good shot I like....

Steven

Angelo

John Mueller wrote:

Whoa,it gives me heartburn
JK, I agree with the cluter.Perhaps a tighter crop

I had worked up some variations. I guess I'll post them. Thanks for looking.

Angelo

Awais Yaqub wrote:

Tighter Crop and b&w
or
Why not all chairs in row of right side of picture

see above

thank you.

Angelo

LiquidOps wrote:

Chalk this one up for "People read art in their own way"

I love this shot... to me, I see an empty counter that seems to be once occupied. I see the waiter (Guy behind the counter) kind of looking off towards the door, probably thinking to himself "Where is everyong Going? Was it something I said?"

I say good shot I like....

Steven

Thanks Steve. Maybe I gave up too quickly. As I said in my opening post, I think there's "something" here. I think I just need to finesse it. Thanks for the support.

Angelo

2 variations. might still need work.


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Dee

Do people even know what a diner is?
Boy does this bring back memories! When I lived on Long Island, and later New Jersey we had diners... in fact my one of my last trips there I met a friend in one in NJ.

I like it, nostaligic, I like seeing the 3 chairs and the left over coffee fixin's, yet to be cleared away for a new customer. I like seeing the colors of the mini juke box (or whatever they are called) and the green chairs...

It's a very warm and welcoming photo (empty chair just waiting for me!).

Angelo

Thank you Dee.... You can enjoy a little nostalgia right in SF at Mel's Diner. I think it's on Van Ness on the Presidio approach.

I'm gonna stick with this one and see what I can make of it. Here's a try with a little desat as suggested.


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back in the Bronx we said; cuppajoe

Dee

Bronx heh?

Angelo wrote:

Thank you Dee.... You can enjoy a little nostalgia right in SF at Mel's Diner. I think it's on Van Ness on the Presidio approach.

I'm gonna stick with this one and see what I can make of it. Here's a try with a little desat as suggested.


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back in the Bronx we said; cuppajoe

I'm a Queens gal myself

Dee

Hate traffic
So we steer clear of Van Ness, but maybe we'll have to try to get to Mel's Diner sometime soon. I did see another diner off the Embarcadero too.

Angelo

Dee wrote:

I'm a Queens gal myself

getout! yeah?

saurora

Angelo, in spite of my comments before about the "clutter", I like how the shot turned out after your subsequent cropping and de-sat. The background is there, but less noticeable and the "cuppa" becomes more prominent. I didn't grow up in the bronx, actually Orange County born and raised. But we had a diner on Main Street (always Main Street, isn't it?) that had jukeboxes on the tables, counter and stools....yeah, I know why this shot hit you!!! Good job!

Spagbag

Oh my, those mini jukebox things are cool!

tmlphoto

Angelo, I really like the crop you did for the last one. I think the "something" is the lighting on the countertop & chairs. You really found some sweet light. I really believe that finding great light ( or creating it) is the key element in many great photographs.

Mongrel

Hi Angelo,
Well-I like the shot, in fact, I *really* like the shot and the idea.

Two 'small' suggestions on the original-

Level your 'horizon', it's just a tiny bit leaning down to the right.

DOF could have been a bit tighter to blur the background more.

The three variations you posted all work as well, and can stand on their own. But I like the openess of the first one posted, it reminds me of older b&w 'environmental portraits I've seen from the thirties and forties.

Your eye gets sharper everyday!

Good luck and good light,

Mongrel

Photosbychuck

Hi, Angelo
I like the photo!
It looks like a very busy place to me.
Counter top full of cups and trash like maybe one of the waiters called
in sick today. You can see that there are several people on the other
side of the room. Maybe they did not leave a tip so, the waiter is slow about cleaning the table . I hate to see dirty tables when I enter a
cafe to eat or get some coffee.

Take Care,
Chuck,
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/northcarolinamodels

Nee7x7

The third version does the trick for me!

I really like the nostalgic feeling you captured. The empty stools can be interpreted in several ways...warm and inviting, lonely and sad, or simply as interesting graphic elements. Any way you look at it, it evokes a mood/emotion, so I'd say it's a winner!

Cheers!
~Nee

R Johns

I'll take the last bit of that jelly! :food

USAIR

Angelo looks like an improvement to me
Only one thing include all the jukebox in the crop
Looks good

Thanks
Fred