My first portrait

marklarry28

This is my first portrait, I took around 120 good shoots.

She is the daugher of my friend.
How long am I shoot? I got my 20D a month ago...:D SO I am not a PRO, next week I start my photography class








Comments welcome

Thanks:thumb

firedancing4life

tomthephotographer

I like them... I find some thing in the first one is of... i am not sure why I tend to want to follow her eyes.... UP

IK realy like that she can smile. ]

Yuri Pautov

Like them all !
Yuri

thegreenegg

The first one is wonderful and it drew me in immediately to your set. You started off with your best one and that always good but the others seem like their by a different person than the first.
Here face is too dark in the second on and the forth one, while more focus on her face, is not focused enough and there seems to be a blue tone in it.
I think your first shot is awesome but the others need a little work.
Really good job, beautiful girl. Hope she likes.
Ashley

marklarry28

Thanks guys for Comments. I really appreciated

douglas

I really like # 1, well done

mmroden

#1 is really good, I like what you've done to it (either that, or found her some really nice grey background to lie on). I like the leaf spacing in the background. My only nitpick would be to fan out her hair, because I really like that kind of thing-- but she may have been a bit hesitant to get leaves in her hair

The second one is just not... alluring. She looks bored.

The first thing I thought when I saw the third one is 'is she going to the prom?" It's almost a prom/David's Bridal kind of shot, showing off the dress more than the model. If that's what you're going for, it worked, but I'm not convinced I can see any of her true personality coming out of that shot, just that she's a model for her clothing.

The fourth one is too green (on my monitor, macbook pro, gamma at 2.2). It looks like there's some kind of green reflectance up into her face, or the green color level was messed with somehow. The effect could work if she had some kind of pixie-ish/impish kind of grin. As it is, the smile doesn't reach her eyes, making it look like she's grinning, but kind of like you'd grin at someone as you walk past them, not because she's geniunely interested or happy to see you.

I'm not saying this to be mean, and I apologize if it comes off that way-- it's just what I think when I see these. Given the goodness of the first shot, you've got the skills.

marklarry28

Thanks some much for your advice. The green picture I will fix.

I have more shots... I will upload them in a few days

marklarry28

Some more pix.
I took these pictures in the same day, I use my sigma 24-70 and a Canon 70-200 F2.8 IS USM (rented).