77 System - How about this idea?

Manfr3dManfr3d Registered Users Posts: 2,008 Major grins
edited November 13, 2006 in The Dgrin Challenges
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Does it carry the message? What do you think?
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  • RogersDARogersDA Registered Users Posts: 3,502 Major grins
    edited November 2, 2006
    Manfr3d wrote:
    Does it carry the message? What do you think?

    I think it's a good system, but the overall image shows "too much"; i.e., there is nothing in the picture that appears to be a focal point of the image. But, that is just my simple opinion.

    Perhaps a different crop. For example, leave off most of the image to the right and bottom of the lower train. Crop just above the right-to-left cable on the bottom. See how that looks.ne_nau.gif
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  • mercphotomercphoto Registered Users Posts: 4,550 Major grins
    edited November 2, 2006
    Manfr3d wrote:
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    Does it carry the message? What do you think?
    I really, really like the shot. Heck, I want to buy a print of it. But to me it says chaos. When I think 'system', I think of something orderly.
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  • nalvareznalvarez Registered Users Posts: 152 Major grins
    edited November 2, 2006
    I think its a cool shot, but I really didn't say "system" to me. To be quite honest, this theme might be rather hard to capture if we go outside the box like you're doing here. Great work!
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  • bhambham Registered Users Posts: 1,303 Major grins
    edited November 2, 2006
    A little to much with all the wires. If you could get just the tracks I think it could work.
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  • davidmigldavidmigl Registered Users Posts: 31 Big grins
    edited November 2, 2006
    I really like the shot in b/w and see its connection to system. It looks to me like a jumbled, built-up-over-time, "jury-rigged", chaotic system. I suppose I could agree that there is no primary focal point, but that adds to the 'chaotic' element.
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  • OspreyOsprey Registered Users Posts: 162 Major grins
    edited November 3, 2006
    I agree with davidmigl, It may be a complex system, but it is certinally a system. I like the shot
  • gusgus Registered Users Posts: 16,209 Major grins
    edited November 3, 2006
    I think its spot on thumb.gif Well done.
  • GranitGranit Registered Users Posts: 86 Big grins
    edited November 3, 2006
    Chaotic system but still a system. Nice shot.

    What seems to bug me is that it's flat, everything is in the same tone.
    Did you try to play with contrast and brightness a little?
  • Manfr3dManfr3d Registered Users Posts: 2,008 Major grins
    edited November 3, 2006
    Thank you all for the replies!

    To answer Granit's question,
    yes I did only a very brief
    b&w conversion here, a point
    that needs to be worked on
    before the challenge closes.

    And if Bill is still interested then
    he'll get his print ;)
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  • BrettBrett Registered Users Posts: 218 Major grins
    edited November 3, 2006
    I am going to have to say I agree with most people. The shot is amazing but I don't think it screams system. This is a really hard challenge so anyone who can even come close gets my respect.
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  • rosselliotrosselliot Registered Users Posts: 702 Major grins
    edited November 4, 2006
    I want to see it!!!!! I only see the DREADED red x!!!!!
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  • Manfr3dManfr3d Registered Users Posts: 2,008 Major grins
    edited November 5, 2006
    Now it should be visible again.
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  • Awais YaqubAwais Yaqub Registered Users Posts: 10,572 Major grins
    edited November 5, 2006
    i loved it it looks like symbol of Pakistani government system ! :D
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  • Manfr3dManfr3d Registered Users Posts: 2,008 Major grins
    edited November 12, 2006
    Awais Yaqub wrote:
    i loved it it looks like symbol of Pakistani government system ! :D
    Do you mean its chaotic too? :D

    I just found out that I can't post the pic above in the challenge because it
    didn't fit into the challenges time when the picture has to be taken. I had
    to do a reshoot. Impossible to get the same position of the train .. but I
    hope it will still work:

    railroadsystem.jpg
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  • imagin'imagin' Registered Users Posts: 38 Big grins
    edited November 13, 2006
    It is a system for sure. I like the image too.
    But the way the image is done does not convince me it is done to shout "system". Trees and hills don't matter. Just a suggestion... bij getting as close as possible and focussing on the wireholders in the lower left side, making that much bigger in relation to the background with rails (half in focus) and a part of a train (almost out of focus but still recognisable). (I don't know if this is possible, though...) Good Luck!
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