LPS 5... Added lady in red, post 4

tsk1979

Here is my last chance to get into the semi's and am trying various things.
Havent got any dramtic sky's this time of the year, even nearby, so am trying to use the sun's disk.
Ideas I have tried till now
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saurora

I like #2 alot. I would crop down and move subject off-center, eliminating some of the left side of the shot. You may need to use a noise filter. Great concept! Love the colors.

Nikolai

tsk1979 wrote:

Here is my last chance to get into the semi's and am trying various things.
Havent got any dramtic sky's this time of the year, even nearby, so am trying to use the sun's disk.
Ideas I have tried till now

I like #3 the best as an idea and composition. Unfortunately, it's weak technically, very soft, I'd even say OOF. If you can reshoot that it can be a real contender...

tsk1979

Lady in Red.....
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tsk1979

Nikolai wrote:

I like #3 the best as an idea and composition. Unfortunately, it's weak technically, very soft, I'd even say OOF. If you can reshoot that it can be a real contender...

Thanks for your advice nik
I have 75-300 USM lens from canon, a very small flower, and limited terrace for 300mm zoom. So I did F14 and tried to focus somewhere between flower and sun, but both came oof. So next time I will focus on the flower only.
The sun set by the time I was done by my antics.
So will reshoot the flowers, meanwhile I await feedback on the second set!

Nikolai

tsk1979 wrote:

lady in red

#3 - score!

Nikolai

tsk1979 wrote:

Thanks for your advice nik
I have 75-300 USM lens from canon, a very small flower, and limited terrace for 300mm zoom. So I did F14 and tried to focus somewhere between flower and sun, but both came oof. So next time I will focus on the flower only.
The sun set by the time I was done by my antics.
So will reshoot the flowers, meanwhile I await feedback on the second set!

Well, how about making a composite? Shouldn't be that hard for this one...

BistiArt

Mix and Match

tsk1979 wrote:

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Now, thats an evocative theme, which simply needs some more experimentation.

1 is the provocative pose {try to get some definition like the shoulder in 2}
2 is the captivating background {softens and mystifies the participant}
3 is too stark, too barren

Is it possible to reshoot 1 w 2's background, then PS?

tsk1979

BistiArt wrote:

Now, thats an evocative theme, which simply needs some more experimentation.

1 is the provocative pose {try to get some definition like the shoulder in 2}
2 is the captivating background {softens and mystifies the participant}
3 is too stark, too barren

Is it possible to reshoot 1 w 2's background, then PS?

All were shot in RAW, same location, with minor differences in shutter speed.
I played around with WB of the pics to get a setting similar to the pic 2 for pic 1, here is the result

BistiArt

Nearly There

tsk1979 wrote:

All were shot in RAW, same location, with minor differences in shutter speed.
I played around with WB of the pics to get a setting similar to the pic 2 for pic 1,

Thanks for listening...

Not to be too picky, but the bed cover seems to be just a bit white. Judicious use fo the burn tool might tone it down just a little, not drawing your eye from her form to it's blast.

If the new 2 showed the background more like the old 3, then i think you are on your way.

Tentacion

Like your composition, and although this is going to sound picky...I have a problem with the feet...Her big toe is coming off of the edge of the shoe...I know this sounds strange, but because I work with so many females this is one of things I watch out for...in another one, the toe is poking out and you can see right thru the arch of her foot, if I were to choose one of your compositions it would be number 3 and I would reposition her back hand to the wall in a little higher position than her left to show off and enhance the curvature of her silohuette in the pic., by raising her arm slightly it would slenderize her torso. You could probably have her lean more to the right which would cover the blanket area

JMO and no offense

tsk1979

New pic.. Defeat

tsk1979

Tentacion wrote:

Like your composition, and although this is going to sound picky...I have a problem with the feet...Her big toe is coming off of the edge of the shoe...I know this sounds strange, but because I work with so many females this is one of things I watch out for...in another one, the toe is poking out and you can see right thru the arch of her foot, if I were to choose one of your compositions it would be number 3 and I would reposition her back hand to the wall in a little higher position than her left to show off and enhance the curvature of her silohuette in the pic., by raising her arm slightly it would slenderize her torso. You could probably have her lean more to the right which would cover the blanket area

JMO and no offense

Fixed the toe..., now how does it look. Tomorrow night will be the last reshoot, if I don't get any more keepers, most probably its going to be this or the defeat shot!

VisualXpressions

personally I think a strong silhouette shot of a person should silhouette the facial features... Your shots are great!

Winston

Tentacion

Hi
I think if I had to choose, I like "Defeat" but more so because it shows the facial silohuette and has a strong stand, even without seeing her face, the emotion is expressed in her stance. (sound strange??).

Like your other one, but it does not show facial silohuette (outline) which looks like a black circle? I love the translucency of the shawl around her waistline and how it drapes her leg, with the candle, to me it indicates a "Come Hither" sort of mood.