LPS#7: Yeah/nay?

Nikolai

This bird has flown



C&C welcome!

Flyinggina

This is one of the most haunting photographs I have seen so far. I keep looking at it and trying to figure out the story. A child grown, graduated and left to make her way in the world? A woman who disappeared with the dawn never to return? Whatever, I feel as though the man is experiencing real sorrow. Not just temporary sadness.

On the technical side, I was bothered at first by all the brightness in the lower left hand quadrant, but I have decided it works. The only thing I would change would be to clone out the dark spots in the window over the subject's left hand shoulder.

Virginia

Nikolai

Virginia,

Flyinggina wrote:

This is one of the most haunting photographs I have seen so far. I keep looking at it and trying to figure out the story. A child grown, graduated and left to make her way in the world? A woman who disappeared with the dawn never to return? Whatever, I feel as though the man is experiencing real sorrow. Not just temporary sadness.

On the technical side, I was bothered at first by all the brightness in the lower left hand quadrant, but I have decided it works. The only thing I would change would be to clone out the dark spots in the window over the subject's left hand shoulder.

Virginia

Thank you, appreciate it! I cleaned and reuploaded, please press F5 to refresh.

saurora

I like it Nik once I knew what was going on. It's a great subject. The brightness made it difficult for me to tell what I was seeing. My first impression? I thought it was a bedside shot in a hospital where someone had died (seriously!). You can tell I've had way too many hospital visits in my past. :cry Advice? Well, you're the master thinker at this stuff!!! I think I might choose my title very carefully. I get the idea that Dad (you?) is melancholy about the bird leaving the nest, but I'm just at first a little vague that what I am looking at is a graduation cap and gown. Hope this helps.

Nikolai

Susan,

saurora wrote:

I like it Nik once I knew what was going on. It's a great subject. The brightness made it difficult for me to tell what I was seeing. My first impression? I thought it was a bedside shot in a hospital where someone had died (seriously!). You can tell I've had way too many hospital visits in my past. :cry Advice? Well, you're the master thinker at this stuff!!! I think I might choose my title very carefully. I get the idea that Dad (you?) is melancholy about the bird leaving the nest, but I'm just at first a little vague that what I am looking at is a graduation cap and gown. Hope this helps.

Thank you!
Their graduation gowns were white, so I was kinda playing on multiple meanings, hence the ultra bright whites (heaven?;-).

LiquidAir

Try holding the mortarboard. That will give it a bit more prominance and make the story clearer. Ideally hold it in a place where it will have good contrast with the background. If you can arrange it, showing your daughter getting in a car to leave out the window would be a nice addition.

photogmomma

Honestly, while I think you could make the meaning clearer, the photo is just beautiful as is. I wouldn't change it at all... I like the ambiguousness of it! It forces you to look harder and harder - thus making the image stronger, IMHO.

Beautiful!

Nikolai

Ken,

LiquidAir wrote:

Try holding the mortarboard. That will give it a bit more prominance and make the story clearer. Ideally hold it in a place where it will have good contrast with the background. If you can arrange it, showing your daughter getting in a car to leave out the window would be a nice addition.

Thank you!
I was trying to hold the diploma, but it was not self-explanatory.
I'll play with the mortarboard, good idea!
Adding the daughter and the car - well, that would be a stretch, since I would have been either saying goodbye or, as it was, driving the car, but in any case, not sitting all by me lonesome...

Nikolai

Andi,

photogmomma wrote:

Honestly, while I think you could make the meaning clearer, the photo is just beautiful as is. I wouldn't change it at all... I like the ambiguousness of it! It forces you to look harder and harder - thus making the image stronger, IMHO.

Beautiful!

Thank you, appreciate it!

Tentacion

I really like this shot, and I believe what I am looking at is a ...Sad Father whose child has graduated and left the nest?

My thought here is that the "graduation" gown needs a bit more detail and contrast to further impact your title

Nice work.

Nikolai

Tentacion wrote:

I really like this shot, and I believe what I am looking at is a ...Sad Father whose child has graduated and left the nest?

My thought here is that the "graduation" gown needs a bit more detail and contrast to further impact your title

Nice work.

You are correct:-) My oldest daughter just graduated and since she has enrolled into the summer class, she left already. House seems half empty..
Thank you for the feedback, I will play more with it tomorrow...

UP N MTNS

It works for me, very nice....

Nikolai

UP N MTNS wrote:

It works for me, very nice....

Thank you!

pemmett

The more I look at this photo the more I like it. clap My only concern is if the judges will spend the same amount of time looking at it and enjoying it?

VisualXpressions

Agree with all said... The window frame protruding from the back of the head is distracting... IMHO

Winston

Strikeslip

Aw, that is sad, Nikolai. :cry

I have a 5 year old girl, and an 8 year old girl who'll be 9 tomorrow! Time is flying and my wife and I often get weepy at the thought of them leaving for university. Our plan is to get them to go to one nearby so they can still be close.

Curses on you, now I'm getting misty. :cry :cry :cry :cry :cry

Nikolai

Peter,

pemmett wrote:

The more I look at this photo the more I like it. clap My only concern is if the judges will spend the same amount of time looking at it and enjoying it?

Thank you, appreciate it!
I guess we'll never know unless I submit it, eh?;-)

Nikolai

Winston,

VisualXpressions wrote:

Agree with all said... The window frame protruding from the back of the head is distracting... IMHO

Winston

Thank you, appreciate the comment, I'll see what I can do...

Nikolai

Strikeslip wrote:

Aw, that is sad, Nikolai. :cry

I have a 5 year old girl, and an 8 year old girl who'll be 9 tomorrow! Time is flying and my wife and I often get weepy at the thought of them leaving for university. Our plan is to get them to go to one nearby so they can still be close.

Curses on you, now I'm getting misty. :cry :cry :cry :cry :cry

Thanks!
After a lot of thinking about it I decided that it's in her best interests NOT to be close to home, so she can grow as an individual and do not rely on daddy fixing every slightest mishap.

Nikolai

I'm gonna go with this one
This Bird Has Flown



Appreciate everybody's input, positive and negative alike!

Elaine

I like it! In your latest version, I see a lot more posterizing (??) on your arm, leg and lower shirt. I didn't notice this before, so I thought I'd mention it. Since the rest of the shot doesn't seem to have that effect (meaning, it doesn't appear you were going for that overall look) I wasn't sure if you'd consider this a distraction? Anyway, I really enjoy the mood of this shot. Can I say that when it's obviously about "sorrow"? I think it's just something most people can relate to on some level.

indiegirl

I dig the latest version--I like the textures a lot. I'm not crazy about the hot white window light, though. It seems a bit out of balance with the rest of the image.



Jesse

Nikolai

Elaine,

Elaine wrote:

I like it! In your latest version, I see a lot more posterizing (??) on your arm, leg and lower shirt. I didn't notice this before, so I thought I'd mention it. Since the rest of the shot doesn't seem to have that effect (meaning, it doesn't appear you were going for that overall look) I wasn't sure if you'd consider this a distraction? Anyway, I really enjoy the mood of this shot. Can I say that when it's obviously about "sorrow"? I think it's just something most people can relate to on some level.

Thank you, fixed, please refresh your cache (Ctrl+F5).

Nikolai

Jesse,

indiegirl wrote:

I dig the latest version--I like the textures a lot. I'm not crazy about the hot white window light, though. It seems a bit out of balance with the rest of the image.



Jesse

Thanks!

All I needed from the window was the light, so I decided to skip all the details over there.

indiegirl

Hey Nikolai! I see you entered and just wanted to let you know your title is misspelled. Brid instead of Bird.

:ivar

Good luck, superstar.

Nikolai

indiegirl wrote:

Hey Nikolai! I see you entered and just wanted to let you know your title is misspelled. Brid instead of Bird.

:ivar

Good luck, superstar.

Duh... :bash
Thanks, Jess, fixed, much obliged!