The Creperie

CarlCam5

My first post in this area.....
.....(gulp!).........






Would love your c&c please,

Many thanks
Carl

Richard

Hey Carl,

This has a wonderful old-time feel to it. Very nice.

I would clean up the background a bit, getting rid of a few bright spots in the otherwise black areas. Just a nit, but I think this shot deserves a little more work.

I fully expect most people will disagree with this, but here's a thought. You might consider splitting this into two shots, one with just the two kids and another with the kid on the right and the soft drink container. There's a lot going on in this shot. Simplifying it might help the viewer.

Regards,

CarlCam5

Richard wrote:

Hey Carl,

This has a wonderful old-time feel to it. Very nice.

I would clean up the background a bit, getting rid of a few bright spots in the otherwise black areas. Just a nit, but I think this shot deserves a little more work.

I fully expect most people will disagree with this, but here's a thought. You might consider splitting this into two shots, one with just the two kids and another with the kid on the right and the soft drink container. There's a lot going on in this shot. Simplifying it might help the viewer.

Regards,

Thanks Richard - those are great tips in my opinion.

Would youhave all the background completely black, i.e so there are no brigther areas whatsoever?
I know what you mean about cropping and considered doing the crop you suggested, but i think I liked the look on my younger lads' face that to me was saying -Right have finished mine, now what can I grab from my brother's plate. I will try the crop though.

All the best,
Carl

Richard

CarlCam5 wrote:

Thanks Richard - those are great tips in my opinion.

Would youhave all the background completely black, i.e so there are no brigther areas whatsoever?

Not completely black. I like seeing the wall, for example. Just those areas that are bright but have so little detail that you can't tell what they are.

CarlCam5 wrote:

I know what you mean about cropping and considered doing the crop you suggested, but i think I liked the look on my younger lads' face that to me was saying -Right have finished mine, now what can I grab from my brother's plate. I will try the crop though.
Carl

That look is precious and certainly worth saving. The reflections in the can (is that a can?) are also interesting. That's why I think it's worth making this into two prints. You can also just clean up the background and print it as is. That will give you three. Such a deal.

Swartzy

I agree with Richard. The drink container almost at first glance seems to be another photo next to the boys. Realizing that cropping that out takes away from the frame size, its still worth a shot to try. The expression and old time feel is way cool. About the only thing distracting to me is the brighter and bigger item on the right. Otherwise, nice shot.

~Jan~

While I do find the mug in the front distracting, I love the grainy b/w. That's my new favorite type of image for my personal snapshots. Nice job!

joshhuntnm

I really like the expressiveness of the kid camera left.

CarlCam5

to Swartzy, Jan and josh
Many thanks for your comments - they are all constructive and helpful.
I cannot make my mind up with regards the cola bottle though...

al the best,
Carl